User talk:MatthewVanitas

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Help on an article[edit]

Hey there. I see you have declined my article. I am new to wikipedia and I just referenced the other articles and submitted mine. I would be thankful if you could just help me out on how to improve my article. Draft: Umer Jubapu. He is the only person in Bhatkal who is a singer and a dancer together and he is very famous for his talent specially around the middle east. Please help me out. Thank you.

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11:04:12, 28 October 2015 review of submission by Imtiaz772[edit]


Dear Matthew Thank you for your review and response

based on your comment , I have two points to clarify

Point no 1: you have suggested to get references from neutral party

my response: In the reference section I have highlighted Khaleej times( News paper of UAE) carrying out an article and covering him as a speaker addressing a gathering of participants, the scanned copies of these originals are available with me and I can forward to your mail if you need them, these are three in number on the date I have mentioned. Khaleej times does not have a weblink of these as these are old and have shared with me the scanned original page

Point no 2: Zuhoori name

in these references of above it is titled as shihabdeen as per his original name, you will not find zuhoori, if this is seen as an issue then I can edit the title of his page as per his original name hypen Madhanisha zuhoori

Please let me know if you need any thing else

Reg Imtiaz

10:28:06, 4 November 2015 review of submission by Imtiaz772[edit]


Hi Matthew, I have provided the needed info, should I resubmit the article?

05:02:52, 6 November 2015 review of submission by 202.83.32.135[edit]


The film is an important one in the Malayalam independent films. It has been already selected to Mumbai Academy of the Moving Image MAMI 2015, International Film Festival of Kerala IFFK 2015 It has got a rare review in The Hollywood Reporter, It is the second film of the director who was awarded Kerala State Film Award for Best Director in Kerala State Film Award.

thank you[edit]

Sorry for Disturbing you again i readed your message and i hope i can , Re Edit it

thanking you after editing i'll inform you and if yo have a free time you can check it out thank you again for your interest

16:39:26, 5 January 2016 review of submission by Writingasaghost[edit]


Thank you so much for your recommendations for improvement. I have done my best to incorporate them and resubmitted.

Article on "Jackson Pyrotechnic Explosion (Chester, PA)"[edit]

Hello Mr. Vanitas,

Thank you for taking your time to comment on my proposed article. I have added an additional reference and I have also added to the article that this disaster was the impetus to establish the first hospital in Chester, Pennsylvania. I am now citing 3 references: newspaper articles from 1882, 1912 and 1963.

I appreciate your comments and your help. Having just retired last year as a senior professional in my field, it is very humbling to be a newcomer to Wikipedia trying to get my first article published.

Again, thank you for your help.

Regards,

Bill McDade

10:23:53, 26 January 2016 review of submission by Silverspoon83[edit]


Hi Matthew. I think I've updated and submitted the draft correctly now :/ ... the draft is here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Cheltenham_OLBG_Mares%27_Handicap_Hurdle . i find it very confusing!

09:49:37, 27 January 2016 review of submission by Jyellen[edit]


Hi Matthew.

This is disappointing to hear. We are the promotional arm of the governing body of British horseracing (see our website: http://www.greatbritishracing.com/#/8RfED6Vk5XiKMGua.97).

What kind of references do you wish me to obtain to get verification on this page?

Many thanks,

James.

Merger discussion for Guanín (bronze)[edit]

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Your draft article, Draft:Brigadier Rohitha Neil Akmeemana[edit]

Hello, MatthewVanitas. It has been over six months since you last edited your Articles for Creation draft article submission, "Brigadier Rohitha Neil Akmeemana".

In accordance with our policy that Articles for Creation is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been nominated for deletion. If you plan on working on it further, or editing it to address the issues raised if it was declined, simply edit the submission and remove the {{db-afc}} or {{db-g13}} code.

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. JMHamo (talk) 22:31, 1 February 2016 (UTC)

James McNulty[edit]

re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:James_McNulty

Matthew, I do not have sources for James' elegy, would a link to the elegy be acceptable?

Article declined due to insufficient references. I have 2 books that make reference to James- would this be sufficient?

Pajokie (talk) 14:41, 3 February 2016 (UTC)Pat

Hello @Pajokie:, the main issue with the elegy is "why should the reader care"? If it was written by someone famous, or is engraved on a monument, or was recited for the record in the Irish parliament, then that could be a valid reason to include it. If it's just something someone put on their blog, or someone posted in a discussion forum, with no clear larger context, then we don't have a reason to include it, regardless of aesthetic merit or the sentiments of its author (even if they are a descendant of McNulty).
Re the books, definitely include any citations to published books that mention McNulty, that always helps strengthen the case for Notability. MatthewVanitas (talk) 10:46, 4 February 2016 (UTC)

00:44:29, 5 February 2016 review of submission by Willie Mae's Tales[edit]



Can you tell me please what editing I will need to do to this page?

Hello @Willie Mae's Tales:, have you read the guideline WP:Notability (music) yet? If you haven't, please take a look at that first, and then feel free to ask me any more specific questions. I just don't want to repeat things that are better learned by reading the guide first. Check it and then get back to me, though it's likely it will answer most of your questions. MatthewVanitas (talk) 15:16, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Nomination of Bakalov for deletion[edit]

A discussion is taking place as to whether the article Bakalov is suitable for inclusion in Wikipedia according to Wikipedia's policies and guidelines or whether it should be deleted.

The article will be discussed at Wikipedia:Articles for deletion/Bakalov until a consensus is reached, and anyone is welcome to contribute to the discussion. The nomination will explain the policies and guidelines which are of concern. The discussion focuses on high-quality evidence and our policies and guidelines.

Users may edit the article during the discussion, including to improve the article to address concerns raised in the discussion. However, do not remove the article-for-deletion notice from the top of the article. ansh666 06:36, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:Gerard McNamee Jr.[edit]

Hello, MatthewVanitas. It has been over six months since you last edited your Articles for Creation draft article submission, "Gerard McNamee Jr.".

In accordance with our policy that Articles for Creation is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been nominated for deletion. If you plan on working on it further, or editing it to address the issues raised if it was declined, simply edit the submission and remove the {{db-afc}} or {{db-g13}} code.

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Onel5969 TT me 12:34, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Draft:Generalised Whitehead Product[edit]

Hi MatthewVanitas, Thank you for your comments on my draft. Since it appears that the review of my draft is still pending, should I wait till it appears before taking your comments into account? Thanks. Ark of Wits (talk) 16:06, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Hello @Ark of Wits:, quite the contrary, "Pending" means you're waiting in line for a reviewer to come along, so you're free to make any changes you like while standing in line. The only time you should refrain from edits is if there's a big clock logo and a "someone is working on this right at this moment" on the page. So game on, now is a good time to do a good clean introduction for the page. You may find it useful too to glance at WP:Lead section for some ideas. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:17, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Your draft article, Draft:International Humanitarian Award[edit]

Hello, MatthewVanitas. It has been over six months since you last edited your Articles for Creation draft article submission, "International Humanitarian Award".

In accordance with our policy that Articles for Creation is not for the indefinite hosting of material deemed unsuitable for the encyclopedia mainspace, the draft has been nominated for deletion. If you plan on working on it further, or editing it to address the issues raised if it was declined, simply edit the submission and remove the {{db-afc}} or {{db-g13}} code.

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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Onel5969 TT me 16:51, 6 February 2016 (UTC)

20:23:21, 9 February 2016 review of submission by Jkstar Creative Media[edit]



Jkstar Creative Media (talk) 20:23, 9 February 2016 (UTC)

Hello @Jkstar Creative Media:, what is your question? MatthewVanitas (talk) 16:57, 10 February 2016 (UTC)

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17:09:56, 10 February 2016 review of submission by Manish Gorawala[edit]


I need Some help on Article creation, Please give some feedback on below Article, If there any changes require then i will change it,

@Manish Gorawala:, please don't paste your whole draft here, just give me the link and I can read it myself.
So far your article is written very much like an "About Us!" page, which is completely wrong for Wikipedia. What I suggest is that you gather any serious media sources (not press releases) that discuss MLeads, and base all your facts in the article on external sources, not just point out things MLeads wants us to know about them. Quite frankly, if there is Fact X about MLeads, and nobody outside of MLeads has found it necessary to comment on Fact X in print, by definition that means it's not interesting to our readers. Makes sense? MatthewVanitas (talk) 17:53, 10 February 2016 (UTC)

Request on 17:40:21, 10 February 2016 for assistance on AfC submission by NCPTSDgjd[edit]


Hello, Matthew,

I am the author of the draft entry, "PTSD Awareness Month," which you reviewed and declined earlier today. I am also the public affairs officer for the National Center for PTSD.

I am certainly willing to edit the submission to make it more neutral in tone, but I didn't think it was very different in tone than the current Wikipedia entry, "Mental Health Awareness Month." If I revise our submission to make it similar to the Mental Health Awareness Month entry, will that make it likely to be accepted?

The main reason my initial submission did not refer to other sources for its content is that the National Center for PTSD's website is the premier source of evidence-based (research-verified) information on PTSD. Virtually all content posted to our website is vetted by subject matter experts, both within and outside the Department of Veterans Affairs. Additionally, although other organizations certainly do join us in promoting PTSD awareness, we are the organization that leads this effort year after year. I can look for other sources that objectively examines the observance, but I doubt there is much of anything out there. Probably for the same reason the Senate unanimously passes its "National PTSD Awareness Month" resolutions every year, I have never seen any criticism of PTSD Awareness Month.

The bottom line is that we are not interested in promoting the National Center for PTSD through this entry, but, similar to the Mental Health Awareness Month entry, we do want Wikipedia readers to know about PTSD Awareness Month and where they can find resources to help raise PTSD awareness during that month and throughout the entire year.

We hope this helps. Thank you for taking the time to review our submission and provide feedback and guidance.

Best regards,

George Decker NCPTSDgjd (talk) 17:40, 10 February 2016 (UTC)

Hello @NCPTSDgjd: (George). I do want to emphasize that Mental Health Awareness Month, despite having hung around for 9 years, is not a well-written article, and quite frankly would not pass the AFC process if published today. It's not so terrible that it needs to be deleted entirely, but I did take a look now and remove some completely inappropriate marketing materials and fix some formatting. A very important point about basing a draft on an existing article: just because a prior article exists, doesn't mean it's good, so it's best to take a look at well-regarded, well-written articles to serve as examples. WP:Good articles is a good place to peruse around those.
So far as outside sources, I'm not suggesting that NCPTSD isn't the premier information source for PTSD in general, instead I'm saying that we need to see other people recognizing such. I'm not saying "show someone more authoritative signing off on this content", I'm saying "find a reputable external observer". Very simply, you need to show outside observers saying "huh, the interesting things about this PTSD Awareness Month is..." We're not asking for "criticism" in the negative sense, we're asking for critical examination where some outsider finds the topic worth talking about. A bit of the old "if a tree falls in the forest" deal; you need to show that the Month (not PTSD itself, not NCPTSD itself, the specific Month observance that is the topic of the article) is something that is talked about. If not, we really don't have anything to go on.
Positively remove anything that smacks of marketing materials, "here's how you...", "for more information...", "try our app!", or that is simply NCPTSD talking about its own work. Also, a huge red flag is that the actual term PTSD Awareness Month doesn't even appear until the second paragraph. Look at pretty much any Wikipedia article, the title term will be at the very start of the first sentence, in bold, and should give a clear who-what-why-when-where. Something like:
PTSD Awareness Month is observed in the United States in June per a 2015 U. S. Senate resolution, building on the PTSD Awareness Day previously established in 2010. The observance calls for public attention to the issue of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder in American veterans, as well as in citizens who are victims of crimes or accidents. The effort was initiated in 2010 by then-Senator Kent Conrad, in tribute to Army Staff Sergeant Joe Biel of the North Dakota National Guard, who committed suicide in 2007 following his second tour of duty in the Iraq War; the original date selected was 27 June, Biel's birthday.
See the difference? Explicitly clear who-what-why-when-where right up front in the very beginning. We do not need a lengthy exploration of PTSD itself, we have an entire article on PTSD, this article should focus specifically on the month itself, like the title says, and why it matters. Not why you or I think it matters, not by giving statistics about PTSD, but by citing external sources such as media, public figures, academia, etc. saying "here is why PTSD Awareness Month is worth talking about".
Make sense overall? Again, this is not a comment on the validity of your organization or its work, it's about holding Wikipedia to a standard, and it would be a disservice to both your organization and WP to let an article publish before it is up to standard. Feel free to write back with any follow-up questions. MatthewVanitas (talk) 18:13, 10 February 2016 (UTC)

OZO films animation deleted page.[edit]

Bonjour Matthew, je présume que vous connaissez la langue Française n'est ce pa? Merci infiniment de votre réponse pour la première publication que jai poste aujourd'hui. Désolé de ne pas pouvoir lire a nouveau la page. En effet cette organisation etait un collectif de differents artistes de lyon en 1985 avec l;'aide et la confiance de Rene Laloux réalisateur connu dans le monde de l'animation, hélas décédé il y a quelques années. Nos liens sont serieux et verifies, pour ma part j;ai travaille a Pdi-Dreamwoks et j;ai plus de 28 ans d’expérience dans le metier de matte-painter. (http://www.imdb.com/name/nm2029844/). Merci de considérer ma bonne foi ainsi que les noms véritables des artistes cites comme Rene Laloux, Jérôme Fournier, Rolland Toppor ( La Palnete Sauvage film co-realise avec Rene Laloux) Les studios La fabrique, Paul Grimaud équipe du roi et l'Oiseau". Jean Francoisi LaGuionie. etc etc...Merci de vos précisions et je tacherai de faire le nécessaire pour rectifier la page. Les nouveaux noms de film comme Ozo le films ne sont pas en rappoirt avec le collectif d'artiste de 1987. Merci , Jerome Fournier (courriel: jeromefournier@riseup.net ) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jeromefl (talkcontribs) 19:55, 10 February 2016 (UTC)

So what i need to show? rather than giving the reasons, can u pls tell me what u need from myside as proof of my correct information?

Thanks - Surjeet Singh — Preceding unsigned comment added by Surjitsippy (talkcontribs) 16:01, 11 February 2016 (UTC)