User talk:MrsLinarcos
The article looks great! However, it needs to be in a certain format that is a more generally accepted standard in Wikipedia. I'd suggest a few things to get you started:
- Take out any first-person comments. Those give Wikipedia a more individualistic feeling, as if you are the one who owns the article. In reality, everything you type is a donation to Wikipedia, and therefore is a representation of it. The article should have a WP:NPOV voice and not sound like any particular person contributed to it.
- Make sections. The article is in the form of a single, gargantuan paragraph right now. Not being an expert on Fred Sadoff, I have no idea how to go about segmenting things about him. For starters, though, you might try making a section called "Early life" and one for "Career" and so forth, tailoring the headings to what is notable about him.
- Find more links. Everything you put in the article about Fred should have something backing it up, and the more sources you have, the better. Simply using one website (especially if it is your own) is not a very satisfactory use of sources.
- Get a picture. Not a total need, but I find that articles about people always benefit tremendously with a picture of the person being discussed.
Please let me know if there is anything I can do to help out with this. I like your enthusiasm and hope to see it applied with great justice! V-Man737 00:31, 28 December 2006 (UTC)