Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Lord's Resistance Army
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- Support - excellent article. Has been on peer review, all feedback incorporated. - Ta bu shi da yu 11:11, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Object. Great article but needs a minor copyedit - At the beginning of 1988, a prominent ex-soldier, Otunu Lukonyomoi, joined LRA, where he was gained popularity for his high moral standards for the conduct of LRA rebels, especially in their treatment of civilians.', Tactics since consist primarily of surprise attacks..., Just as important as the change in the material circumstances of the LRA, was the change in how the LRA perceived the conflict., Also, following the classifying of the LRA as a terrorist organization by the U.S. State Department, it agreed to stop supplying aid to the LRA., the start of "Attempts at peace and militia creation (Early 2003)", etc. The "Prominent Incidents" section also needs a cleanup and a bit of wikilinking. Apart from this, kudos.Wonderful. Support. Ambi 11:36, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- I've reworded or split the sentences mentioned, as well as others that were run-on or had an excessive number of clauses. "Prominent incidents" is now complete sentences and better wikified. - BanyanTree 05:50, 7 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Object. I like the scope and level of detail of the article, but it needs some major work in the copyedit and reference department.
At the moment, there are no in-line references nor pointers to the sources listed in the "References" section. This makes checking the facts all but impossible except for people who have read all the reference works and know which part of the article is sourced from what. List the page numbers from which information is lifted and use in-line links to external web sites. See: Wikipedia:Cite sources.
- Initial pass done. Let me know if there should be more. - BanyanTree 18:29, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Another thing: I think the sometimes quite lyrical prose needs to be toned down a bit. Examples: talks with the government died stillborn, bow-and-arrow groups were hopelessly overpowered, this ultimatum irrevocably scuttled the talks, etcetera.
- Reworded the sentences mentioned. - BanyanTree 02:56, 8 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Many occurrences of: "...is believed to...", "...seems to...", "...appeared to...". Believed by whom? Appeared to whom? Try to be specific (and again: cite sources).
- Most of these are sourced now. An overview:
- 1 occurence of "...seems to...", unsourced ('The violence seems to have been motivated...')
- 2 occurences of "...is believed to...", 1 sourced, 1 unsourced ('Khartoum is believed to have substantially curtailed aid...')
- 4 occurences of "...appeared to...", 3 sourced, 1 unsourced ('...what appears to be a significant movement towards a negotiated peace...') — mark ✎ 00:50, 7 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Most of these are sourced now. An overview:
The use of "currently" in the article's intro: maybe use the more timeless As of 2005 instead?
- Done. - BanyanTree 18:29, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Use en-dashes instead of hyphens for date ranges.
- Good luck, and thanks for the very interesting article! --Plek 12:29, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Much improved. Changing vote to support. --Plek 20:02, 7 Feb 2005 (UTC)
Damn. I thoughtYAY! this great, and grown heaps since I first saw it, but Plek makes some good points.--ZayZayEM 12:54, 6 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Support - most objections above seem to be addressed. Minor formatting issue - do all pictures have to be on the right? --ZayZayEM 04:29, 8 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Support. Good lead-in and context to long-running wars in Central Africa. Wizzy 19:21, Feb 6, 2005 (UTC)
Object, I'm afraid. This looks very good, but it definitely needs one or more photos (Kony seems like a logical subject). Jeronimo 22:10, 7 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Two photos from IDP camps and photos of the two relevant presidents added. There are only about five known photos of Kony, none of which appear to be useable. - BanyanTree 02:56, 8 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Great, support. If you do get hold of an image of Kony, please add it. Jeronimo 11:16, 9 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Once upon a time (about a year ago, actually, when the main page redesign was still brand new), I was the fourth person to edit this article - I added a current events item in order to get the article on the main page's In the news section and bring a little more diversity there. Looking at the article now, I am amazed at how far it has come, and very much look forward to seeing it show up on the main page again, this time as a featured article. Support, support, SUPPORT! --Michael Snow 19:34, 9 Feb 2005 (UTC)
- Support. Thorough, encyclopedic and possibly the best article on the LRA on the web. TreveX 18:01, 10 Feb 2005 (UTC)