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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by Dabomb87 23:20, 27 January 2009 [1].

List of tanks in the Spanish Civil War

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This is my first nomination for featured list. I'm sure I can work through it, though. JonCatalán(Talk) 22:37, 16 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 17:03, 19 January 2009 (UTC) [reply]
Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "The Spanish Civil War provided many European countries a chance to evaluate new technologies and tactics, especially in regards to armored warfare."-->The Spanish Civil War provided a chance for many European countries to evaluate new technologies and tactics, especially with regard to armored warfare.
  • "Although the Nationalist and Popular Fronts began the war with only five FT-17 light tanks each,[2] the Soviet Union began to supply the Popular Front with T-26 tanks as early as October 1936." I don't see how the second clause ("the Soviet Union began...") contradicts the first (Although the Nationalist and Popular Fronts began the war with only five FT-17 light tanks each")
  • "Italy began to supply Nationalist Spain with L3/35 light tanks in August 1936,[4] while the Germans sent its first shipments of Panzer I light tanks to the Nationalist Front in September 1936." "while"-->and.
  • "A considerable number of tanks delivered to the Popular Front were subsequently captured during the war,[7] many of which were put into service against their former users.[8]"-->A considerable number of tanks delivered to the Popular Front were subsequently captured during the war;[7] many of these were put into service against their former users.[8]
  • "prior to"-->before.
  • "between 15–20"-->15 to 20 (try not to use en dashes in prose)
  • "In Cataluña, two tanks were produced by the Maquinaría Moderna factory, in San Sadurní de Noya." Second comma not necessary. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:26, 18 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:26, 18 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, thanks! Everything should be changed. JonCatalán(Talk) 16:44, 18 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose too many niggles...
    • "... imported material..." I may be wrong but I thought in this context the correct work was materiel?
    • "... the Germans sent its first shipments ..." not "the Germans", just "Germany" for the rest of the sentence to work.
    • If this is a comprehensive list of tanks in the Spanish Civil War then surely Trubia A4 should have an article since you state "The Nationalists, for example, began the war with three Trubia A4 prototypes..."
    • A few too many generalist statements, e.g. "as early as", "a number of", "for example", "In general". Just think the prose in the lead needs a good copyedit.
    • "...and the Trubia factory had designed and built a single model of the Landesa." I´m not following the logic of this clause.
    • Any reason why Tanks is capitalised in the collapsible navbox?
    • Why are the tank names in the table in bold?
    • Keep the table styles consistent - why the big difference in table styles between those tanks produced by the national and the popular front?
    • Number or Number produced? Be consistent with table headings.
    • Suddenly you mention the Second Spanish Republic in the table. It´s not mentioned before or afterwards. What is the context for this tank type?
    • Ref 4 needs pp. not p. to be consistent. Check other multiple page references.
    • Fourth and sixth general references use pp. when only a single page is used.
    • "... another 10 required return rollers..." this means nothing to a non-expert.
  • Hope the comments help push the quality of the list towards featured status. The Rambling Man on tour (talk) 22:03, 23 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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