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1998–99 NBA lockout[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because this is the first article I've attempted to bring to good article standards, and I want to receive some pointers before a GAN nomination. This is an article that I created less than two weeks ago, and one that two editors have already suggested I nominate for GA. All comments are greatly appreciated and will be acted upon.

Thanks, Giants2008 (17-14) 01:40, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

Comment

  • The lead is a bit short.
  • "work stoppage" is used many times - perhaps it needs to be rephrased
  • link "U.S. team" to the US national basketball team
  • "The 1998–99 season, which began in February 1999, was shortened to 50 games per team, as opposed to the normal 82." - maybe good to be specific on the date
  • "29 percent ... 24 percent to 22 percent. Twenty-five percent ..." - be consistent on using numbers; also need non-break space in between
  • More images if possible

Chris! ct 01:53, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

  • Agreed. I expanded the lead to two full paragraphs, attempting to use facts from every section.
  • I saw four of them in the article and changed three.
  • Done
  • It was February 5. That's now in the article. I'll get the other two later. Giants2008 (17-14) 14:59, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
  • The spelled-out number began a sentence, which is one time when a number over nine should be spelled out. Fortunately, it was easy enough to change it to one-quarter. Non-breakers have now been added to all of the percentage numbers in the article.
  • I added one of Patrick Ewing, the president of the union at the time. Giants2008 (17-14) 21:40, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
  • Looks good now, I think.—Chris! ct 00:06, 24 April 2009 (UTC)