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History of Ireland[edit]

Another great article about Ireland from the guys at Wikipedia:Irish Wikipedians' notice board, and one very close to FAC quality. Needs some proofing and 'outsiders' opinions. Thanks Seabhcán 14:00, 25 October 2005 (UTC)

  • Any way of losing the huge whitespace before Direct Rule (1971-1998)? Filiocht | The kettle's on 11:39, 28 October 2005 (UTC)
Done Seabhcán 20:30, 29 October 2005 (UTC)
  • What would be nice: reduce the lead to 3 paras; add a pic to the lead; the pics at the bottom of 'Norman invasion and the Kingdom of Ireland' section are too cluttered - move/resize/remove; replace main article/see also templates with the correct one ({{details}}) and delete the ones refering to a yet-non-existing article. More notes would be nice as well. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus Talk 02:13, 1 November 2005 (UTC)

I haven't had time to read the whole article thoroughly but here are a few thoughts:
  • The language in the opening sentence-and-a-bit should be more formal: it sounds like the start of a novel at the moment.
  • Early Christian Ireland: I'm not keen on the sentence "Perhaps it was some of the latter..." - words like 'perhaps' and 'probably' strike me as unencyclopaedic. Similarly, "Patrick is credited, possibly too much so, " sounds like one person giving their opinion rather than something authoritative. If some sources suggest that Patrick got too much credit, it would be good to briefly state why they think this is so.
  • It could do with a copyedit. Sentences such as "If Rome, or an ally, did invade, they didn't leave very much behind." are awkward and I think the article uses parentheses too much. I like it overall though, the content is good, it's an interesting read and it's good to see such a well-illustrated article. Definitely ready for WP:GA if you want to add it there. 24px CTOAGN (talk) 01:15, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
  • I also haven't had the time to read the article. Couldn't some information be put into the many daughter articles? The article is very huge. It is quite hard to review it without pre-requisite in Irish culture. I think one could reduce this to something like 35-40 KB. In particular the lead is quite long. Isn't there a way to digest this a bit more? Vb 13:15, 16 November 2005 (UTC)