Wikipedia:Peer review/Jacques Chirac/archive1

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Jacques Chirac[edit]

What do you think? David.Monniaux 09:41, 3 October 2005 (UTC)

It looks pretty good overall. Some suggestions: It is in need of more references, and could use a few more details on his personal life. (Who was his first wife? Where did he grow up? Mention is made of his "extensive family acquaintances", but no details.) Most of the bulleted lists need to be expanded into prose to give it a polished appearance. The list of ministries can be formatted into tables. There's a few sentences that are dangling their participles. (E.g. "schemes he has been named in." -> "schemes in which he has been named." &c.) Typo: "ofteen". Thanks. :) — RJH 19:40, 3 October 2005 (UTC)
Actually, he only married once. I've rephrased it to make it clearer. The article on fr: has more references and more details, I think we should copy from it. David.Monniaux 06:24, 4 October 2005 (UTC)
Yup, that works for me. — RJH 20:13, 7 October 2005 (UTC)