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List of airports in the Okanagan[edit]

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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see it at featured list status, and would appreciate any feedback anyone may offer.

Thanks very much, TBrandley 22:22, 19 December 2012 (UTC)

Giants2008 comments

  • "with Kelowna providing the same amount". This is one of those awkward "with ... -ing" connector type of sentences that the prose reviewers at featured content processes don't care much for. You could try "while Kelowna provides the same amount" or similar to fix the writing.
    • Done. TBrandley 02:45, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
  • The "however" at the end of the second paragraph seems like an unneeded add-on. The rest of the sentence gets the point across by itself.
    • Done. TBrandley 02:45, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
  • The biggest question I have about the list is whether SkyVector is a reliable source. I've never seen it or heard of it before, but am admittedly not that familiar with airline websites. It's worth addressing before an FLC nom, since half of the references are to SkyVector.
  • I questioned the reliable sources noticeboard, although I do personally believe the source is reliable. Thanks for the comments. TBrandley 02:59, 23 December 2012 (UTC)

Giants2008 (Talk) 02:26, 23 December 2012 (UTC)