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Low back pain

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I've listed this article for peer review because the article is of high importance and could use some work. I am a college student and I am currently doing a project for my anatomical kinesiology class. My group and I will be working to edit this page to further benefit the wikipedia community and would like some help from some editors.

Thanks, Dominicbaiocco (talk) 02:20, 4 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments by Cryptic C62 I see that you're part of Musculoskeletal Injuries Project. Welcome to Wikipedia! My first piece of advice that I can offer you is to ignore all rules and just start getting your hands dirty. Edit as much as you can, both on your topic of interest and anything else that comes up. That said, let's see how you can improve this article:

• How are the Classification and Differential diagnosis different? I feel like the information can be combined into one section, especially since Classification is so short. If you do decide to keep them separate, Classification will need to be expanded to at least a full paragraph.
• "X-rays are useful in determining deformities in your bones." Avoid usage of the second person (you, your, ya'll). See WP:YOU.
• The section title Red flags is informal and ambiguous. What does it mean? In addition to having a more precise name, this section would benefit from having a few introductory sentences before the list.
• The second paragraph of Prevention (the one dealing with the spine–nicotine relation) has nothing to do with prevention!
• The Conservative treatment does not explain what "conservative treatment" refers to. It appears that we don't have an article on it either.
• Epidemiology can be expanded in many many different ways. There are several featured articles on diseases/syndromes/injuries, such as Acute myeloid leukemia, Meningitis, and Subarachnoid hemorrhage. Maybe reading those would give you a good idea of how to expand this and other sections.

If you want more feedback on the article, leave a note here or on my talk page. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 15:15, 11 May 2010 (UTC)