Wikipedia:Peer review/Social networking in the Philippines/archive1
Social networking in the Philippines[edit]
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for November 2008.
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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan on bringing this subject to WP:GA status. I also would like to know how would I, and other editors as well, be able to improve the article. Thanks, Starczamora (talk) 07:11, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
Comments by Sky Harbor
This is my first PR, so I'm kinda nervous (I ran into it when I launched the third PR for Iloilo International Airport), but based on what I saw, here are a few suggestions:
- The lead is too short and does not comprehensively cover the article's content.
- The history can use some expansion. From where it currently stands, it's what I call "Friendster-centric". Maybe you can add information on the boom of Multiply, for example, or Facebook. Carmen Leilani de Jesus herself cited in one of the citations why Friendster became so popular (like how it was the first social networking site to launch in the Philippines), and a link in that citation notes how the Philippine boom was devastating business-wise, so try adding those as well.
- Refs are missing in some places, particularly in the Statistics and Applications sections.
So far, those are what I can think of. If I find any more comments and/or suggestions, I'll be sure to add them in. --Sky Harbor (talk) 03:46, 22 November 2008 (UTC)