Wikipedia:Peer review/The Slip (album)/archive1
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After a fairly easy GA nomination, I'd like to eventually get this article up to par for a try at FAC. I feel like it's pretty close, though I would appreciate a few more eyes to take a look. Any comments are welcome and appreciated. Drewcifer (talk) 20:40, 7 September 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This looks pretty close to FAC to me, here are some nitpicky suggestions for improvement.
- Could these two sentences be combined somehow to be tighter? . It was recorded, performed, and released in three weeks, with Reznor releasing the album's only single, "Discipline", to radio stations himself. The song had been mastered by Moulder less than 24 hours before it was released to radio stations. perhaps as something like . It was recorded, performed, and released in three weeks; Reznor released the album's only single, "Discipline", to radio stations himself, less than 24 hours after it had been mastered by Moulder.
- Could this sentence be made simpler, perhaps split into two? Some instrumental performances were contributed by live-band members Josh Freese, Robin Finck, and Alessandro Cortini, though they did not participate in the songwriting process; their contributions were limited to small parts rather than complete song recordings.
- NIN needs to be explained as an abbreviation, probably after the first time "Nine Inch Nails (NIN)" appears in the article
- The first sentence of the Release section is also a bit long / awkward, but I am not sure how to fix it
- These probably need refs for FAC: The digital download is available in a variety of DRM-free audio formats. The lyrics for each track are embedded using ID3 tags, allowing for their viewing in supported media players. and As with Ghosts I–IV and Year Zero, multi-track audio source files of the album were also made available at remix.nin.com.
- Could these two be combined? The Slip was released on CD in the United States and Canada on July 22.
The album[and] was released as a six-panel digipack which contained the album itself, a 24-page booklet...
- I assume the Billboard 200 only counts sales of phyiscal copies - could this somehow be made clearer?
- Could these also be combined? Rolling Stone named The Slip in their "Best of 2008" list, ranking the album at number 37. Rolling Stone also named Reznor number 46 in its "100 People Who Are Changing America" list...
- Could a free image of Reznor be added?
- Otherwise it looks pretty good to me
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:38, 19 September 2009 (UTC)
- You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- What makes the following reliable sources?
- Sources that are in languages other than English need to have that language noted in the reference
- Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 21:06, 28 September 2009 (UTC)