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Yellow (song)[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been promoted to GA and GT, and me and ThinkBlue are going to try FA. But before that, we would like to get some feedback from you guys.
Thanks, Efe (talk) 10:33, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
- Comments
- Make the lead a bit longer, if you can.
- I know it's free, but I don't think we need a picture of a phone book.
- See if you can get a review of the single from one of the British magazines. For example, NME reviews singles all the time, and it's possible they may have picked the song as its Single of the Week.
- Good models to follow for a song article of this size are "Losing My Religion" and "In Bloom". Note in particular how the music video sections are arranged.
- You need to include citations in the chart position table as well. WesleyDodds (talk) 10:19, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
- I don't agree with your second comment. The Yellow Pages aren't that well known outside the US and a picture of its yellowness would illustrate the commentary.--Diaa abdelmoneim (talk) 14:43, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
- Yellow Pages are extremely well-known outside the US – in the UK, and pretty well throughout the English-speaking world. The volumes in the image are from Aukland, New Zealand. I'd say the image is pretty well unnecessary; everyone likely to read this article will know what Yellow Pages directories look like. I wouldn't myself make an issue of it, but should the article go to FAC, someone there might think it purely decorative, so think about it. Brianboulton (talk) 16:17, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
- Sort of half decorative and half educational. Some do not know about what that Yellow page looks like. --Efe (talk) 11:00, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
- Give all that's said in the prose is "He looked around the studio and found the telephone directory Yellow Pages, which happened to be situated nearest to him, hence the title", a picture is unnecessary, because the prose doesn't even make a point about the appearance of the book. Tha fact that it's named Yellow Pages is sufficient. WesleyDodds (talk) 23:17, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
- Sort of half decorative and half educational. Some do not know about what that Yellow page looks like. --Efe (talk) 11:00, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
- Yellow Pages are extremely well-known outside the US – in the UK, and pretty well throughout the English-speaking world. The volumes in the image are from Aukland, New Zealand. I'd say the image is pretty well unnecessary; everyone likely to read this article will know what Yellow Pages directories look like. I wouldn't myself make an issue of it, but should the article go to FAC, someone there might think it purely decorative, so think about it. Brianboulton (talk) 16:17, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
- I don't agree with your second comment. The Yellow Pages aren't that well known outside the US and a picture of its yellowness would illustrate the commentary.--Diaa abdelmoneim (talk) 14:43, 23 January 2009 (UTC)