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List of awards and nominations received by Guy Sebastian

List of awards and nominations received by Guy Sebastian

I am requesting feedback for this article I created. Thanks! Ozurbanmusic 01:13, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Also good. ~ QwerpQwertus ·_Contact Me_·Get Adopted! 02:47, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Wow, an excellent article. Plenty of references, infobox and the tables are really great. Chevymontecarlo - alt 06:45, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Thanks Chevymontecarlo. The tables and citations and all research was mine. Ozurbanmusic simply copied and pasted it and moved it to a separate page from Guy Sebastian's main page and added an info box. After it was moved I decided to break it up into Award categories and add a little info on each award section. As a separate page it was a little plain as just one long list of awards.

Natbelle (talk) 12:24, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

The list was incorrectly split from the main article. The result of this is that other contributors, such as Natbelle, is not given due credit for their contributions. You should always mention in the edit summary of both the main article and the new page that you are copying content from another page. Since this was not done in this case, I would strongly suggest adding {{copied}} to Talk:List of awards and nominations received by Guy Sebastian with the appropriate parameters filled out. decltype (talk) 12:39, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Floozybackloves/Margo Oliver

My main reason for preparing this article is to clarify Margo Oliver's bibliography. I collect her cookbooks, and found it impossible to sort out the confusion using Alibris, ABEBooks, etc until I had acquired copies of all of the titles. The list of books and their data are drawn from copies in my possession.

Margo Oliver is probably unheard of by Americans, but many Canadians remember her newspaper writing, and her cookbooks are highly valued by those lucky enough to own them. I have restricted the information given to those elements connected with her career as a writer on cooking.

Floozybackloves (talk) 05:11, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Nice work. I like the book details that you have included - the ISBN numbers are really handy things to include and it's great that you've added them to the article. I was thinking that you should maybe move the references in the 'Life' section into the actual paragraph rather than in the section header - you can put the citation/reference next to the appropriate sentence so it makes it easier for the reader to check up on the statements made in the article. Other than that, I would also consider maybe adding more links to the article - you can do this by placing [[ ]] around a word to link to another Wikipedia article - for example [[Loughborough]] would create a link that if clicked would lead to the Loughborough Wikipedia article. I hope you understand :) Chevymontecarlo - alt 06:43, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

I felt that putting the references on the "Life" section heading clued in the reader that both references are general sources of information, not just specific points. Otherwise, the entire section would be sprinkled with references to those two articles, which somehow seems unproductive, looks bad, and is pointless, especially in view of the brevity of that section. I'll take a second look, though.

Glad you like the article, and pleased that you appreciate the detail on the books. When I was actively collecting her cookbooks, it was impossible to be sure how many titles were involved largely because of the triple publication of item 8 under three different titles, one an abridged form. it was only when I had copies of them all that I could see what the situation was. There'll be fewer cookbook collectors tearing their hair out with this information all in one place.

Floozybackloves (talk) 16:15, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

I've moved all the references to the "Notes" section, instead of having numbered references in the body of the article. This should be an improvement. I'll wait another day or two, and if there are no further substantive comments, I'll move the article to the main part of Wikipedia.

Floozybackloves (talk) 01:53, 17 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Vivlom/Multiple Baseline Design

Hey guys,

I've added the necessary citations in the ==Concurrent== section, and set up some wikilinks to key terms when possible. Please take a look it over and publish if possible!

Thanks a bunch! ~~vivlom~~

Nice article, but try and add some external links and categories to the article if you can. Categories allow the article to be listed with similar articles, and as a result helps to increase the amount of traffic to an article. You can start looking for sutiable categories to the article at . You can then add the categories to the bottom of the article, where they will automatically appear in a bar at the bottom. I think you should also add relevant external links to the article if you can - if you've come across pages that you perhaps don't think are good enough to use as references or that WP:CITE does not allow to be used as references, such as YouTube, you can add them to the article as external links. If you have any more questions please feel free to ask. Thanks! Chevymontecarlo - alt 11:34, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

good info..health communication in India

I found the info in Health communication in India very useful so please make sure this write up should not be delated . Dr Ashwani Singh —Preceding unsigned comment added by 117.199.168.74 (talk) 15:03, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

The article was deleted as an essay and/or original research. I assume a notice was placed on your talk page, but you didn't post with your user name, so I don't know who you are. If you want more information, post here while logged in, so I don't know who you are. I can put you in contact with the sysop who deleted the article is you need more information.--SPhilbrickT 11:54, 21 June 2010 (UTC)

Litera

Looking for any and all feedback. Thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by OneMooreConsultant (talk • contribs) 15:29, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Congrats on your first article, but there's still work to do! While you should rewrite the body in prose format, you should first insert references to third party reliable sources. In order to stay on Wikipedia, a subject must pass the general notability guideline. Companies must also pass Wikipedia:Notability (organizations and companies). Please read the guidelines and add the necessary references to demonstrate notability---until then, it is a good candidate for deletion. If you need help, ask here, on the Wikipedia:New contributor's help page, or on my talk page. Thanks, liquidluck✽talk 05:33, 17 June 2010 (UTC)

Initial entry

draft article

Vapor Trails (The Novel) is the name of a novel written by RP Siegel & Roger Saillant and published in May 2009 by Sustainable Stories. It is the story of Mason Burnside, an oil company executive who, after using ruthless tactics to reach the number 2 spot in the company, is brought down when a major project of his, in the Ecuadorean rain forest turns into an environmental disaster. In a cynical punishing move, his boss and rival, Jack Masterson demotes him to a staff position as head of corporate sustainability, something that is abhorrent to both of them. Hoping to regain his stature, Burnside vows to find a way to undermine the environmentalists that populate this movement. He attends a conference in New Orleans to study the enemy's ways, but when a category 4 hurricane sweeps over the city, he finds himself fighting for his life instead. Eventually he finds himself stranded in a flooded out house with Jacob, a young wide-eyed environmentalist, and the beautiful Diana Mars, one of the keynote speakers at the conference. His conversation with Diana makes quite an impact on him, and might just provide an opening for his assistant, Ellen Greenbaum to persuade him to set out to find his predecessor, John Pennington, who has disappeared under mysterious circumstances. As the story unfolds, many of the company's dark secrets are revealed. www.vaportrailsthenovel.com http://www.amazon.com/Vapor-Trails-1-R-Siegel/dp/0615297471/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=books&qid=1276701767&sr=1-1 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bikewriter52 (talk • contribs) 15:44, 16 June 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for your contributions. To create an article, please read Wikipedia:Your first article. As Wikipedia is an encyclopedia, articles must not contain original research, must be written from a neutral point of view, should cite reliable sources which verify their content and must not contain unsourced, negative content about living people. Articles on books should meet the notability guideline for books, lest they be deleted. It may be helpful to use the article wizard to guide you through the creation process.

If you have questions, please ask here, on the Wikipedia:New contributors' help page, or post a message by editing my talk page. Thanks, liquidluck✽talk 05:48, 17 June 2010 (UTC)

Liquidluck, I hope you don't mind me striking through your post - I think you got the wrong end of the stick and I don't want to confuse the new editor.

The article that Bikewriter52 is refering to is Vapor Trails (The Novel). I have made an obvious correction to the first line. I have also removed the "unreviewed" tag and added tags explaining the problems with the article. The best way to solve these problems is to find book reviews or something like that. These will show that the book has been noted elsewhere and they can be cited for information about the book, beyond that which is in the book itself.

Yaris678 (talk) 21:57, 20 June 2010 (UTC)