I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I would like to try the procedure with a more controversial page. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:29, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
References comments with random assorted shots as well - (this version)
The lead seems rather short.
Done Inserted longer lead
Ref two: "The Army List of Officers of the Australian Military Forces, 1946" - where is this in the "references" section/what is it?
Done Added it to the references
Ref Seven: should be able to have a publisher, right? (just the Aussie gov't?)
The Roll of Honour? No, it's not a published document. But it can be viewed online, or in hard copy at the War Memorial
Can a link be added here? Or does this go through RecordSearch too? —Ed 17(Talk / Contribs) 21:15, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
Are the London Gazette references formatted differently, or it that just me?
They are all generated from the same template. But some citations are in what is called the "Supplement".
As I have no idea if these count as being "consistent", I'll let this go and let FAC deal with it. :) —Ed 17(Talk / Contribs) 21:15, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
What are refs 55–59?
Documents. Probably fall under the category of "if you don't know you don't need to". Military historians have certain standards for referring to documents.
NAA (ACT) A5954 266/1
NAA - National Archives of Australia
ACT - Held by the ACT office, in Canberra
A5954 - Series A5954 Which is the "The Shedden Collection" - Records collected by Sir Frederick Shedden during his career with the Department of Defence and in researching the history of Australian Defence Policy
266/1 - File 266/1 "Higher Army Direction of Operations in New Guinea. General Blamey's Arrival in New Guinea. Lieutenant General Rowell's Return to Australia."
The title and date allows you to locate the document within the file.
The description given gives you all you need to view it at the National Archives, or order a copy made, or view it online. It is available online.
Starting sentences with "But" seems very American for an Australian-themed article - could we pls have "However" or something else...?!
DoneI've noticede that people in New South Wales like to end their sentences with "but".
My understanding is that ship names are formatted as HMAT Thirty-Six, not HMAT Thirty-Six.
"bizarre twist of fate" is a bit peacockish - if the cited source uses similarly colourful language, perhaps it'd be better to quote from it.
Slightly more serious - though not sufficient to make my support conditional on it - is whether there may be too much reliance on Rowell's own book as a source. The reason I don't think it's too bad a thing is that the article doesn't seem hagiographic, which would've been a risk when relying so much on the subject's own writing. However if the citations could be a little more evenly distributed among the refs I think it'd be a good thing.
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