- Improve the lead, the two sentences sticking out is strange. It also has a generic start, try to make it more original
- A tropical wave emerged from the west coast of Africa on August 30, and maintaining a vigorous area along the wave axis, the wave tracked westward across the Atlantic Ocean. vigorous area of what?
- By September 1, most of the deep convection had been stripped away by southwesterly wind shear. However, the wave remained well-defined as it continued towards the west-northwest. I'm a bit confused by this, how can it be well-defined if it's convection has been stripped away?
- There was no convection, but the wave was still well-defined on satellite imagery, I guess. Not sure how to explain it further. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 15:42, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
- Link center of circulation in the second paragraph
- Around the end of the second paragraph, you seem to ramble on about the trough, not sure what to say about it, but it seems strange
- Did very little happen between it's peak intensity and becoming extratropical? It looks rather short (IMO)
- Well, it went from peak strength to tropical depression in a single day, so there's not much more to say.
Cyclonebiskit (talk) 03:28, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the comments. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 15:42, 7 January 2009 (UTC)