User contributions for Wragge
A user with 3,218 edits. Account created on 4 April 2005.
25 May 2023
- 00:4200:42, 25 May 2023 diff hist +155 Hamid and Umer Hayat Put the inline external links in reference format, and condense the wp:noted sentence (on the FBI's rebuttal) to remove the 60% that was editorial.
16 May 2023
- 05:0005:00, 16 May 2023 diff hist −38 Antifreeze The wp:noted importance isn't explained (or clear) so simplify this last sentence, by removing the editorial.
15 April 2023
- 18:0718:07, 15 April 2023 diff hist −15 List of films with a 0% rating on Rotten Tomatoes →List: If OR could mean eXclusive-OR then this fragment "(OR with both)" would increase ambiguity (not reduce it). So it's clearer without the redundancy.
- 18:0218:02, 15 April 2023 diff hist −59 Simon West →2000s: Close the quote marks (within quote marks) and simplify the "Would have would have" quotation. .
- 17:3917:39, 15 April 2023 diff hist +1 m Samaritans →Origins: Grammar of verb<->number agreement Tag: Reverted
- 17:2617:26, 15 April 2023 diff hist −18 Cannabis in Nevada →Consumption lounges (2021): These have been open for a while now; it's in the past tense.
- 17:2117:21, 15 April 2023 diff hist −85 Cannabis in Maryland →Prohibition and decriminalization: Make the "previously" section more concise and more chronologically specific.
5 April 2023
- 01:5901:59, 5 April 2023 diff hist −31 Tal Bachman →Personal life: This WP:NOTED editorial can't be quite right--it's hardly notable that somebody has once written something similar
1 April 2023
- 06:5306:53, 1 April 2023 diff hist −35 Jacquet (game) →Obligation to play highest die: "It should be noted in passing that" was editorial taking up more than half of the last sentence. Please see: WP:NOTED
26 March 2023
- 22:4122:41, 26 March 2023 diff hist −12 Apophenia →Pareidolia: Don't need to say: "drug usage" here, because (whatever is this evidence) the study must have been on the users (not on the chemicals themselves or non-users in the room).
- 18:2018:20, 26 March 2023 diff hist +21 Views on military action against Iran →Opposition to an attack: It's not a range of 42% to 47% opposition, so make this less ambiguous.
- 18:1018:10, 26 March 2023 diff hist +14 Deep water culture →Commercial deep water culture: WP:NOTED editorial sentence start removed, because this already has been noted (in the previous paragraph)
19 March 2023
- 00:0800:08, 19 March 2023 diff hist +1 Hugh Despenser the Younger →Remains: Remains are plural.
- 00:0300:03, 19 March 2023 diff hist +50 Armenian–Tatar massacres of 1905–1907 →Analysis: Readability improvement for: "being organized, leading to..." sentence, and fix the <Brill2> url (doi foundational website link not found).
18 March 2023
- 23:1423:14, 18 March 2023 diff hist +269 De Broglie–Bohm theory Some WP:NOTED cleanup, and link a few technical terms where they first appear in the text. Also, 2007 isn't recent any more (while 2021 probably is in this context). Tag: Disambiguation links added
- 03:3403:34, 18 March 2023 diff hist +3 Churchville Nature Center →Programs: "trailed" is probably a typo (for "trained", unless it means the that the tourists trail after the docent?)--but either way, the word can be removed (as it's mostly redundant).
- 03:3103:31, 18 March 2023 diff hist +14 Churchville Nature Center →Bird Blind: A more common name for this is a "hide"; link that.
- 03:2903:29, 18 March 2023 diff hist −57 Churchville Nature Center →Mission and symbol: The center's mission statement may officially target everyone in the world, but (since that's transparently impossible) we don't need to have it in that form here.
14 March 2023
- 23:0323:03, 14 March 2023 diff hist −1 Individualist anarchism →top: Interwiki link is needed for this key (but obscure word). "Eigenheit" was so uncommon (even in 1924) that Renzo capitalized it.
- 22:4322:43, 14 March 2023 diff hist +36 Armenian–Tatar massacres of 1905–1907 →In Baku: Link the right Ganja. And make a tense correction to the past for this debate (they can't continue "to argue" as most of these historians are retired or dead). And reword to avoid wp:claim, while closing the direct quote marks.
- 20:3720:37, 14 March 2023 diff hist −5 Solar radiation modification →Disagreement and control: Present tense: it's already in force (and has prohibited this for 45 years, as far as we know).
- 20:3120:31, 14 March 2023 diff hist +241 Solar radiation modification →History: Add a citation for charitable registration of DI, but remove the 2010 registration date (which is not given on the cited official pages of the Charity, and which is contradicted by the Charity commission's registration date). There are no obvious publications from DI dated before 2020.
- 20:0920:09, 14 March 2023 diff hist +2 Climate change →Reducing and recapturing emissions: It's "modification" (not "management") in the article's title, and giving that name is more useful here (since its more self-describing & less euphemistic).).
- 17:3817:38, 14 March 2023 diff hist −222 Perlis F.A. Some redundancies & grammar fixed for English, and remove: "was a defunct team", which was an unclear and probably misleading introduction, because WP:NOTDIC means the article should cover the team (rather than a specific team name). "Defunct" implies disbanded (rather than moribund/banned) and "was" implies a transition (that isn't spelled out in the text).
- 17:0217:02, 14 March 2023 diff hist −2 Zambian kwacha →Exchange Rates: Minor grammar fix: sentences need verbs. And the daily FX fluctuation (range) means that we shouldn't quote a single day's rate at 4 significant figures.
- 04:0004:00, 14 March 2023 diff hist −13 Architecture of Jacksonville Grammar fix, and remove the heavy wp:noted editorial in the lede.
- 03:2303:23, 14 March 2023 diff hist +59 Trust company →Banking services: This section is entirely about trusts in Canada, and not about Trust banking services in general. So the subtitle should reflect this content.
- 03:1503:15, 14 March 2023 diff hist −35 Species affected by poaching →In Sub-Saharan Africa: Zimbabwe is in Southern Africa, but its not really in South Africa. Unfortunately, an optimistic wp:crystal also has to be corrected.
- 02:5202:52, 14 March 2023 diff hist −28 Holocene extinction →Mitigation: <ref name="Bongaarts2018" /> citation was undefined, and removed as unnecessary, since two other citations have been given here.
- 02:4802:48, 14 March 2023 diff hist +77 Holocene extinction →Mitigation: Segway into the mushroom sentence from the population reduction sentences connect
- 02:4002:40, 14 March 2023 diff hist −1,184 Holocene extinction →Mitigation: Either population reduction or global vegetarianism/hemp-cultivation might mitigate climate change, but attempts to wp:soapbox or debate these approaches (or any other solutions) should first be taken to the main article's page: Climate change mitigation (if not its talk page).
- 02:0702:07, 14 March 2023 diff hist −9 List of sovereign states by wealth inequality Data quality is important to note, but there's no DQ conclusion to editorialize here, beyond the variability of precision already mentioned in the last sentence.
13 March 2023
- 06:1906:19, 13 March 2023 diff hist −96 Culture of the United States →The nuclear family and family structure: The Cited (Wilcox) article does not make this claim (in fact, it assumes the opposite)
- 04:2504:25, 13 March 2023 diff hist −9 Human Compatible →Summary: With no tension between this sentence and the previous one, "However..." was confusing.
12 March 2023
- 19:1619:16, 12 March 2023 diff hist −43 Cox–Ingersoll–Ross model By its own definition, the ECIR discussion belongs in the "Extensions" section. It's also much clearer this way, since the ECIR definition had appeared before some statements that didn't apply to it.
10 March 2023
- 19:5219:52, 10 March 2023 diff hist −37 World government →Supranational movements: "viewed [...] being succeeded by" seems ungrammatical, but it's also unnecessary.
- 15:4715:47, 10 March 2023 diff hist −21 Shogi →History: Clarify ungrammatical sentence.
- 15:2515:25, 10 March 2023 diff hist −107 JWH-133 It can't be that both of these paragraphs have WP:NOTED importance, and make the separate sentences in the first paragraph grammatical as standalone sentences.
- 15:0015:00, 10 March 2023 diff hist +21 Pleonasm →Bilingual tautological expressions: Per the first sentence of this section 'the hoi [polloi]' is ineligible ("the many" and "the" do not <<mean the same thing if different languages>>). Anyway, link the hoi element that's probably repeated
8 March 2023
- 22:1222:12, 8 March 2023 diff hist +48 Clearance cairn →Creation: This article should link Stone Age, but should give the standard (Bronze Age) case before the (rare) ancient case.
- 21:5621:56, 8 March 2023 diff hist −65 Clearance cairn →Heat Radiation: Simplify this paragraph to avoid WP:NOTED and a word-for-word copy from Portsmouth University's summary
- 21:2621:26, 8 March 2023 diff hist −354 Star Wars: The Old Republic →Development: Put the planned delay from 2011 in the past tense, and remove some of the "center" repetitions.
7 March 2023
- 05:0105:01, 7 March 2023 diff hist −166 Cyril of Alexandria →top: No room for WP:NOTED throat clearing in a one-hundred-and-thirty(!) word sentence. As well as being unreadable, does this mega sentence on calendar systems have undue weight in the introduction?
5 March 2023
- 22:5622:56, 5 March 2023 diff hist −18 Zambian kwacha →History: Correct a general claim that is immediately contradicted by the following sentence and paragraph
- 16:1316:13, 5 March 2023 diff hist +25 Working class in the United States →Political role of the white working class: The cited 2012 blog didn't claim an absolute demographic decline in white US voters
- 16:0416:04, 5 March 2023 diff hist −5 Working class in the United States →Political role of the white working class: There are many voters, but a singular "segment".
- 15:5315:53, 5 March 2023 diff hist −43 Escape from New York →Book: Whether notable or not, that publication should now be in the past tense
- 15:4015:40, 5 March 2023 diff hist −6 Upload →Copyright issues: Replace the ambiguous cliché "followed in its wake" with the point that the others also shut down (rather than replacing Napster)
- 15:3715:37, 5 March 2023 diff hist +515 Kazaa →Lawsuits: The Jammie Thomas page covers the conclusion in some detail; that should be reflected here.
- 15:0415:04, 5 March 2023 diff hist −8 Kazaa No need to add that copywrite-related lawsuits are related to copyright