Draft talk:Damchoe Yongdu

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Comments were "not enough resources cited" and "appears to be promotional". I'm going to make an attempt to cut out what's extra and not cited and see what's left in the lead and first couple paragraphs. Feel free to revert my edits where you feel I've overstepped. Badabara (talk) 00:14, 31 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Way too long[edit]

My understanding is if this draft page wants to become a wikipedia page it's going to need to be edited way down. We don't need to know every event that took place...

Yongdu was an organizer and had an interest in architecture etc. Rather than a chronological accounting of every event, topics should rather be placed into general categories such as "early life", "personal life", "interest in architecture", "architectural achievements", "relationship with Karmapa", "responsibilities as secretary" etc.

The only editors that can do this are those that have the most interest and understanding of the subject, and that may be the same editors that started this page.

This should all be shortened down to perhaps 1/4 size of its current state.

Best of luck! Badabara (talk) 00:32, 31 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]