Talk:Japanese cruiser Takachiho/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 04:47, 24 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The figure of speed of 18.5 knots in the infobox varies from the figures in the body
The complement figure in the infobox is also contradicting the figures in the body
Infobox specifies the 1-inch Nordenfelts were quadruple; recommend citing this in the body as there appears to have also been single and double versions of the 1-inch Nordenfelt, so it's not an automatic equivalency
Not seeing where the armor thickness for the gun shields is cited.
"As Japan lacked the industrial capacity to construct such vessels, the ship was designed and built in the United Kingdom" - This reason for construction in the UK doesn't seem to be in the body
"No damage was inflicted on either side and returned to Kunsan, Korea." - missing a word?
"No damage was inflicted on either side and returned to Kunsan, Korea. for the rest of the month, the Flying Squadron escorted troops convoys to Kunsan." - I think maybe "for" should be capitalized, as it seem to be the start of a new sentence
"so Uryū decided to send his transports to unload their troops in the port as the Russians would unlikely to initiate hostilities in neutral territory amidst the Western ships - I believe instead of "would", you probably want "were" or "would be"
"and he nearby ships that he had the enemy in sight" - something seems to be off here
Brook 2000 does not seem to be used.

That's it from me; placing on hold. Hog Farm _Talk 05:23, 24 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

See if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:48, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Made one minor tweak, please check for correctness. Looks good to me; passing. Hog Farm _Talk 04:31, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]