Talk:Today the Sun's on Us/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer:  (talk · contribs) 12:42, 10 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Lead
  • "the English recording artist..." Why do you include "the" in this sentence?
  • The article is written in British English, therefore it follows the variant's rules.
  • "...and others" change to "...while others"
  • Not done. It would provide weak contrast (the tone of the song doesn't really relate to the singer's vocals).
  • "...and features Ellis-Bextor and her boyfriend following another couple, and eventually stealing them" I can't clearly understand this
  • Reworded.
Recording and composition
  • Fixed.
  • "...the English musician" Once again, why "the"?
  • "...the Swedish songwriter" Again
  • Rules of BrEng.
  • "and discusses "appreciating the good times"" seems a bit odd to me
  • Slightly reworded.
Music video
  • Do we have any reviews for the video?
  • Unfortunately, no.
Overall
  • Ref. 13 has problem.
  • Fixed.
  • All issues have been replied to or fixed. Thank you for your review, Simon! pedro | talk 11:59, 13 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Well, nothing to concern anymore. Passing, well done! Simon (talk) 14:30, 13 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]