Talk:USS Cincinnati (CL-6)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

• Lead and infobox;
  • She was also the third Navy ship named for "after" the city of Cincinnati
    • fixed
  • Link Ohia, Atlantic Fleet, Pacific Fleet, Mediterranean
    • Didn't link Ohio since it's already linked in Cincinnati and I've been told that would be overlinking. But I will if you want.
  • from 1928–1932 -> from 1928 to 1932
    • fixed
  • Be consistent of mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic", "South Atlantic"
    • Hopefully I caught them all and fixed.
  • A comma after "After the war"
    • fixed
  • she was quickly deemed surplus
    • fixed
  • Per WP:INFOBOXUSE, flag icons and thumbnails must be avoided in infobox.
    • Per WP:WORDPRECEDENCE, call flags are accepted.
• Section 1;
  • to be built by Todd Dry Dock & Construction Co., Tacoma, Washington,^[5] "on" 27 August 1917
    • fixed
  • and launched on 23 May 1921,^[3] the cruiser was sponsored by Mrs. Charles E. Tudor; I think it is better to break this sentence
    • fixed
  • Her keel was laid on 15 May 1920, and "the ship was" launched on 23 May 1921
    • fixed
  • and "was" commissioned "on" 1 January 1924
    • fixed
  • having been designated by the Honorable John Galvin; what does this mean?
    • He designated who the sponsor would be. I can remove it if it is too confusing.
  • and commissioned 1 January 1924, Captain Charles P. Nelson in command; start this as a new sentence and as "The ship was commissioned on 1 January 1924 with Captain Charles P. Nelson in command.
    • fixed
  • Use full forms of the units on their first mention
    • fixed
  • Originally she was to mount "be mounted by" ten 6-inch (150 mm)/53 caliber guns
    • fixed
  • above-water, torpedo tube mounts for 21-inch (533 mm) torpedoes; no need of comma
    • fixed
  • Please be consistent on using the conversion template; "21-inch (533 mm)" "three inches (76 mm)"
    • Not real sure what you mean but I removed the second conversion because it had already been converted in the previous paragraph.
  • against muzzle blast and splinter damage.^{[4] [7]} Fix the space
    • fixed
• Section 1.1;
  • Some of these changes were save "to reduce" weight
  • fixed
  • these didn't prove "to be" reliable
    • fixed
  • Its also reported that Cincinnati mounted a pair of Army 40mm Bofors guns also; check the usage of "also", replace "mounted a" with "was mounted by a"
    • Reworded, hopefully fixed.
• Section 2.1; all good
  • Yay
• Section 2.2;
  • After only a "an" year in the Pacific"," Cincinnati returned to the Atlantic
    • fixed
  • A comma after "After the United States joined the war"
    • fixed
  • Fix the space; searching for German blockade runners .^[6]
    • fixed
  • Fix the space; before she sank. ^[6]
    • fixed
  • from March 1944 until "to" July 1944
    • fixed
  • Consistency on mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic" "South Atlantic"
    • fixed
• References needed for sections 3 & 4
  • Added proper reference.
• Images OK, no plagiarism found

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:18, 17 November 2017 (UTC)

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)