Talk:United States v England (1950 FIFA World Cup)/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 09:54, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

My comments inline. —howcheng {chat} 19:18, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article. I've done a couple of similar style articles and taken one to GA before (although they were cup finals), so I'll give it a read through now and list points below as I come across them. Miyagawa (talk) 09:54, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Although the WikiProject's Match Manual of Style is a proposal, and also is tailored to cup finals, there's a few things that the article should follow in order to at least roughly follow it. These are:
    • Background renamed to Pre-match.
 Done
    • There needs to be a section created simply called "Match", with First half and Second half inserted under it as the first two subsections, and Details renamed to Match details, and inserted as the third subsection.
 Done
  • I would merge Remaining matches into Aftermath.
    • Aftermath needs to be renamed to "Post-match" and moved to after the Match section. So in order, it should be Pre-match, Match (First half, Second half, Match details), Post-match, Footnotes etc.
 Done, but I disagree with merging "Remaining matches" and "Aftermath". "Remaining matches" deals with other events at the World Cup, where as "Aftermath" discusses events that take place outside the World Cup. Keeping them separate seems to make more sense to me.
Sticking them both down as subsections is an acceptable compromise - however, I'd say to move the John Souza line to Aftermath. Miyagawa (talk) 20:22, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Quotations section needs to go, or have the quotes be merged into post-match with some prose to go with them. The MOS frowns on quote only sections: see bullet #5 of WP:LONGQUOTE.
 Done
  • Every paragraph needs to have at least in-line citations at the end of the paragraph, and there are a number of uncited paragraphs at the moment. These include the first paragraph of Background, the first two of First half, the second paragraph of Second half (although also looking at Second half now, all three paragraphs would probably be better if they were merged into a single paragraph.
I'll have to get Douglas' book from the library again this weekend to get citations for the match details. —howcheng {chat} 17:50, 11 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Remaining matches is uncited except for the last line. Again, this could use some re-jigging - I think that the first three paragraphs should be merged together.
 Done
  • First and last lines of Aftermath are also uncited.
 Done

Once you've had a chance to look at all that, leave a note here and I'll do a sweep for the prose. I've got access to a couple of British newspaper archives and I'll do a check for them now to see if there's anything to add. Also to note, that any images related to this match would completely meet the requirements of the Fair Use policy and so would be able to be added to the article under that. Miyagawa (talk) 10:21, 8 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There's a few problems with the references. Firstly, where a general reference has been used it has to be under either a references or notes section header, and not a further reading heading. There's a few different ways of doing this, and you're welcome to use any you like, but what I like to do is to stick both under the references section header, and then ;General and ;Specific to split the general reference up from the numbered references - it'll give headers without adding a section header. However as I said there are several methods, and you're welcome to use any of them. Further issues are:

  • Can you check reference #2, as I can't seem to get it to load.
 Done: web.archive.org
  • Any news based reference sources and any websites with a hard copy alternative should be in italics, so The Independent and Wall Street Journal need to be italics.
 Done
  • Ref #19 needs to be BBC Online to match the other citations.
 Done
  • 2010 FIFA World Cup South Africa shouldn't be in italics.
I can't do anything about that ... the {{cite web}} template does it.
That's alright, I fixed it - the citeweb template removes the italics from an entry if you put the code in for italics. I know, it's bizarre, but it works! :) Miyagawa (talk) 12:52, 12 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref #10 doesn't have the original website listed, so US Soccer Players needs to be added.
 Done
  • All the BBC references need to have the publishing dates added.
 Done
  • Ref #21 has a different date format for it's publishing date, as does #20 and #10 for their retrieval dates, and #13. There's a couple of other examples, but basically all the references need to have a matching date format - considering that it's an article about the USA versus England, I think that pretty much allows you to go with whatever format you like!
 Done: all date formats made consistent
  • Ref #14 could do with a retrieval date in order to match the other references.
 Done, sort of. Had to go to the wayback machine for this one too. —howcheng {chat} 21:22, 11 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

You're getting there, after those reference formatting issues have been resolved, I'll get around to that prose - and get around to checking the Times archive (because I would love to find a British 10-1 headline for you). Miyagawa (talk) 19:41, 11 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, prose time (and sorry for the delay!):

Lead: Apart from the first sentence, all of the lead needs to be duplicated in the aftermath as the lead should be a summary of the rest of the article. As such the lead also needs to give a brief summary of the other sections.

  • Pre-match: Link first instance of World Cup.
  • Is there a specific citation for "Kings of Football"?
  • You might want to add a direct citation after saying that Stanley Matthews was one of the best players in the world - otherwise I think that someone will come in afterwards and stick a needs citation tag in there.
  • Also needs a cite for Matthews watching the game with the reserves.
  • Last line of Remaining Matches needs a citation.
  • I would merge the last two paragraphs of Aftermath together.

I can't see any specific phrasing issues, so we should be all good there. Miyagawa (talk) 16:43, 15 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

These are all done now. In addition, I expanded the Aftermath section a bit. I also plan to move the article to United States 1–0 England (1950 FIFA World Cup), following the naming convention I proposed at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Football. —howcheng {chat} 09:08, 17 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

We're almost there - once "England had no more chances on goal and the game ended in victory for the U.S. team." has a citation added, this should be good to go for GA. Miyagawa (talk) 21:29, 17 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I re-read that part of the book and it turns out the end of the game was a bit more exciting than I'd originally written. —howcheng {chat} 07:36, 18 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Once that page needed tag is filled, this can be promoted. Miyagawa (talk) 12:08, 18 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't add that piece and I don't have access to that book, so I just deleted it. —howcheng {chat} 16:16, 18 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, I think we're there, happy to mark this one up as a GA. Miyagawa (talk) 19:53, 18 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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