User talk:Nairndan/sandbox
Assignment 1[edit]
Excellent! Medmyco (talk) 02:22, 21 October 2013 (UTC)
Peer Review[edit]
- Sizing might be ambiguous to most readers: “macroconidia (7-30 X 35-160u), clavate microconidia (2.5-3.5 X 4-7u)”
- Factors required for growth is very clear and well sourced, but maybe discuss what it needs to grow, then the inhibiting factors, for a better flow.
- Should link “Tinea capitis” and “Tinea corporis”
- Restructure the second sentence, do not begin with “Then” : “The fungus invades the epidermis, enters a hair follicle, penetrates the hair shaft and grows down the length of the hair. Then, it forms a sheath of spores around it.”
- “There is an array of tests...” should be “There are”
- Possibly, explain diagnostic procedures in greater depth, more simply.
- Should link “Microsporum canis” and “alopecia”.
- Epidemiology would probably be better placed before Pathology, Diagnostic and Treatment headings.
Well done! BrigRein (talk) 18:14, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
Hi, Here are some suggestions,
- Should italicize Microsporum audouinii in the sections.
- "chemical composition and the quantity of the hair sebum secreted in adults is different from that of children" I think " ...in adults are different" may be better.
- maybe link "Tinea capitis"
- Spelled Tinea coporis wrong.
Really great work.