Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Abolitionism/archive1

Abolitionism

What article could fit better than one about how a group tried to free those under slavery?--Timorrison 19:54, 6 April 2006 (UTC)

• Object:
  • The lead is too short. It should become a brief overview of the article- see WP:LEAD
  • Lacks inline citations (WP:FOOTNOTEs)
  • Weak, uncomprehensive sections (like Modern usage)
  • What is the point in adding "Notable opponents of slavery [not all "abolitionists"]" if the article discusses Abolitionism?
  • Please see WP:CONTEXT for date-linking rules
  • List-weighty

There are some other issues, but these are a start. AndyZ _t 20:42, 6 April 2006 (UTC)

• Object
  • Almost no mention of slavery in this period outside that controlled by Europeans and Euro-Americans. what about the Arab slave trade and the slavery practices of some African peoples?
  • The article's writing style and structure needs to be improved considerably. The very first sentence after the lead doesnt make sense:

"many British merchants became wealthy in over one million human lives"

• • Much much too list-dependent.
  • Why are only the history of a few countries discussed in prose?
  • Modern day section basically a stub - needs much more (what about slavery (Nazi and Japanese) during World War II?
  • theres only one picture

Good topic, but needs lots of work Bwithh 02:19, 8 April 2006 (UTC)