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Canadian heraldry

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I've listed this article for peer review because… there were some issues raised when I nominated for GA. I think the issues have been addressed, but I want to make sure the article is as good as it can possibly be before re-nomming.

Thanks, Prince of Canada ^{t | c} 12:47, 11 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments by Thehelpfulone
This is my first time reviewing, so if I get something wrong - don't be afraid to say so! The comments are a little short, because I'm still learning...

• First section, History - there is too much whitespace from the image left over. Either expand this section or make the image smaller.
• Grant Process is a broken link.
• Make sure all cite webs use, publisher and access date.
• Some short paragraphs of one or two sentences need expansion, otherwise merge them together.
• Link checker shows 1 broken link, and a few references without access dates or publishers.

Hope this helps, The Helpful One ^Review 14:14, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

 Done Much help, thank you! Prince of Canada ^{t | c} 14:42, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Gary King (talk · contribs)

• "achievements—coats of arms—in" – "achievements, such as the coats of arms, in" – change to this to make it flow better; also, I'm assuming this is what is meant
• "United States of America" – "United States"
• remove the periods from image captions are not full sentences
• brackets are used way too much in the article; merge them into the prose
• there's too much "e.g.", "etc.", and whatnot. It's as if the sentences just give a few examples then trail off! Remove the "etc."
• quotes should be double-quotes, not single-

Gary King (talk) 02:39, 19 October 2008 (UTC)

 Done I think. Many thanks! [ roux ] [x] 12:17, 19 October 2008 (UTC)