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Community Impact Newspaper

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I've listed this article for peer review to see if it is in danger of being an WP:ADVERT Advertisement. I've started independent third-party editing on it recently to make it less of an advertisement than it was originally. Appreciate an opinion. Thanks. Austex • Talk 21:12, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

Thanks, Austex • Talk 21:12, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article. What is here is interetsing, but it needs a lot of work to better follow the Manual of Style. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are several Featured Articles on newspapers that may be useful models - see Sunderland Echo, Street newspaper, and The Philadelphia Inquirer
• This article needs to follow WP:LEAD - currently it has no lead section.
• The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article
• Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself
• My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
• The article needs many more references and should use refs from independent third-party reliable sources as much as possible. See WP:RS
• Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase. Convert all external links in the article to inline references.
• Article needs more references, for example the Management section and first paragraph of History have zero refs and need some.
• My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• The Management section seems to me to fail WP:NOT (Wikipedia is not a Directory, again look at the model articles to see how they handle the staff)
• Similarly I do not think that FAcebook and Twitter links are normally included in articles - since they are on the paper's webpage and that is linked here, I think this violates WP:EL
• The article does not follow WP:ITALIC in its use of bold fonts
• Headers do not follow WP:HEAD - don't use /
• The Publications / trade areas section seems to contradict itself (or at least is not clear). It says eight editions in Austin area, then the next paragraph lists way more than eight in Austin metro Austin metro: Central Austin | Northwest Austin | Southwest Austin | Buda | Cedar Park | Georgetown | Hutto | Kyle | Leander | Pflugerville | Round Rock | San Marcos | Taylor | Westlake |
• Make sure to provide context for the reader - need to say that this is in Texas in the first sentence.
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:14, 7 September 2011 (UTC)