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Greg Daniels

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I've listed this article for peer review because Daniels is a very great comedy writer and has worked and created several classic series. I think he has earned a good article

Thanks, NoD'ohnuts (talk) 03:03, 27 December 2011 (UTC)NoD'ohnuts

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article, here are some suggestions for improvement - I assume your goal is WP:GA since you think "he has earned a good article". I think it looks pretty good

• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are several FAs at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Media_biographies which might be useful models.
• Avoid WP:OVERLINKing - The Simpsons is linked twice in one paragraph in the lead, for example.
• Also avoid vague time terms like currently (as they can quickly become out of date). It is better to use phrases like "as of YEAR" - see for example He is currently working on both those shows and is developing two animated series ...
• Any chance of getting a free image of him?
• In the Life and Career section, I would add years wherever possible - when did he attend (or at least graduate from) Phillips Exeter or Harvard?
• Or when he did he start at Not Necessarily the News, or SNL?
• Writing is OK, but could be tightened - one example He was hired in the fifth season following the departures of many of the original writers from the previous season.
• Articles on people associated with TV and movies almost always list their work at the end of the article - not in the middle
• Also the whole Credits section needs references
• IN Awards I would list all his nominations, not just his wins (and give the years)
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 19:55, 11 January 2012 (UTC)