Wikipedia:Peer review/Katamari Damacy/archive1

Katamari Damacy[edit]

I am nomintaing this article for peer review because I am a big fan of Katamari, and would like to see it become a featured article. I think it is really close, especially after adding the sections on setting and characters. I have commissioned a friend of mine to draw some pictures of characters from the game in order to avoid ugly copyright issues. Any suggestions and/or improvements are welcome. RyanGerbil10 17:28, 12 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

If you knew me, you would know I am vehemently against lists, let alone lists more suitable for an FAQ. I suggest removing that huge list of characters and condensing it into a paragraph or two on Cousins. -- A Link to the Past 17:32, August 12, 2005 (UTC)

The intro lead section seems a bit short and...boring. I suggest you merge the name section into it. The story section starts rather abruptly - If you could explain what kind of theme the entire game has before introducing the plot points it might make more sense. Als, the gameplay section should probably come before the story and characters section, as it is very difficult to understand what you're explaining otherwise. Scott Ritchie 20:26, 12 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I think I have made some changes that address your concerns, but if you have any more, I would be glad to edit the article further. RyanGerbil10 05:13, 13 August 2005 (UTC)[reply]