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McGill University

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I've listed this article for peer review because the last one only brought forth a couple of replies, and because this article only has around 3 users working on it. We would like some more suggestions to McGill University. We have someone about to do a full copyediting, and the past week has seen more than fifty edits to improve this article. Thanks, Sunsetsunrise (talk) 11:39, 6 May 2008 (UTC)

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• There is too much detail on the Redpath Musuem in the lead. It should be chopped down to one sentence, and merged into the bit above it in the lead.
• this image claims in the Fair use rationale that it is the "Whole logo of McGill University", yet the image name is; "Mcgill crest.png", should not it be "Whole crest of McGill University?
• I dislike having the image mentioned above at the bottom of the infobox. There should be one image of the schools crest in the infobox, not two.
• In the History section, When he died in December 1813, this task became the responsibility of the R.I.A.L., a reference is needed for that.
• In the history section On March 31, 1821... the date needs to be wikilinked. Also, id like to see a reference for this; In fact, due to the lawsuits—which did not finally end until 1835—and because the college had little money (the government was not funding the institution at the time), classes were not held until 1829, when McGill College was officially inaugurated. Id also like a reference for this; That same year, the Montreal Medical Institution became the college's Faculty of Medicine and its first academic unit. If the Montreal Medical Institution was really notable, this might be worth mentioning in the lead.
• In the history section; In due course, the R.I.A.L. lost control of the 84 grammar schools it had administered. - How did it lose them, and why?
• In the history section; The Institution's name appears on all cheques cut by the university. - Does anyone care?
• Royal Institution for the Advancement of Learning is abbreviated to RIAL early in the article, but it still appears in full throughout the first section of history.
• Does there really need to be a one paragraph section on the school getting battle honours, it may be very notable (possibly mentioned in the lead), but it doesnt deserve its own section and breaks the flow of the article
• In the McGill français movement section, the full date March 28, 1969 needs to be wikilinked. Id like a few more references in this section also, for example; The McGill français movement began in 1969, clamouring for a new McGill that would be francophone, pro-nationalist, and pro-worker..
• In the Academics section; McGill's student population includes, both full-time and part-time, 23,758 undergraduate and 7,323 graduate students in over 340 academic programs in eleven faculties (as of 2007-2008). Reference needed.
• Also need a reference for; where the students come from, what language they speak, fluency in french is not a requirement, the faculty of law stuff, break down of students into faculties.

Five Years 04:59, 7 May 2008 (UTC)

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• the schools share a successful publishing house (McGill-Queen's University Press). How do we know its successful, why is it successful? or is this just POV? Is there a reference for it.
• There has been a McGill alumnus or alumna competing at every Olympic Games since 1908. - This MUST be referenced.
• The second use of the school coat of arms in the article is not allowed per Fair Use.
• The article mentions the full text of the school song, does the song really deserve to be written out in full? Even if it does, what is its copyright status? Is there a reference confirming that those words are correct?
• The Misc Facts section lacks any serious notability. Id just delete it all.
• Id like part of notable alumni section to have more prose, going into more depth about certain categories of alumni, eg. it has an olympic runner who got gold, etc.
• Image:Robertseanleonard.jpg is a Fair Use image, it cannot be used in this article.
• Image:Universitas21.jpg doesnt even have a Fair Use Rationale and should be deleted from wikipedia. Add one ASAP so it will survive.
• The section on Campaign McGill should either be deleted or moved into history (with less emphasis)
• To try and create a better flow in the article. May i suggest the following;
  • Move Campus to the position under History
  • Make facilities a sub-section of Campus
  • Make Athletics a sub-section of Student life
  • Get rid of the Finances section -- the info is important, but not to its own section.
  • Merge research into Academics -- they seem to go well together.
• Hope this helps. Five Years 16:52, 7 May 2008 (UTC)

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