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Spacecraft Systems and Controls Lab

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to get some feedback on this page. We are currently working on a Wikipedia page for an English class and feedback is required. Since my topic is not something mainstream, I have requested a peer review. I hoping to get feedback on the content of this article.

- Did you find that the article was interesting? - Was their enough material in the article? - How can I improve the article?

Thanks,

Tom

Ruhrfisch comments: I will evaluate this on how it follows Wikipedia's Manual of Style. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• The lead should summarize the whole article and not include anything that is not also in the body of the article. The title should also be bold (I did this when I moved the PR request tag to the article's talk page). See WP:LEAD
• Use <ref>Reference text</ref> tags, not external links right in the article as is done for http://calspace.ucsd.edu/spacegrant. See WP:CITE
• I see there are some references in the article, but most of it is still unreferenced - verifiability is key here so this needs many more refs - see WP:V
• Be consistent - is it IJEM (header) or IJEMS (article)?
• This despeately needs a copyedit - In 2007, the lab was remained to the Spacecraft Systems and Controls Lab... I think is supposed to be "renamed", not "remained"
• Avoid needless repetition - the SSCL is given twice in just the lead of the article.
• Pictures need captions - see WP:IMAGE
• References need to be consistent, try using {{cite web}}
• To be honest, I found the idea interesting, but the article didn't really tell me that much of a coherent story about the lab and what it did or does. For example, what did they learn from IJEM(S) - which sounds as if it is the most successful thing from the lab to date.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:22, 13 April 2008 (UTC)