Wikipedia:Peer review/USA PATRIOT Act, Title I/archive1

USA PATRIOT Act, Title I[edit]

My goal is to summarise each of the Titles of the PATRIOT Act. As the USA PATRIOT Act currently stands, it doesn't really give details of what is covered by the law. I hope to create summaries of each of the ten titles and then we can work back with summaries in the main article. Yes, topsy turvy I know but necessary. My comment on Talk:USA PATRIOT Act stands. - Ta bu shi da yu 11:28, 26 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Seems like a very good start, and will be a valuable addition to wikipedia. I've gone through it and done some copyedits/rewrites, trying to simplify and tighten the language without losing any of the essentials. Brandon39 17:47, 27 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good so far. The comments I can offer are not really limited to this article, but to the entire series in general. First of all, there are some sections in the USA PATRIOT Act that are contentious to some people. I am not up on what all of those sections are (I do know there's one I disagree with about searches of library records, though I think it was weakened recently). In any case, though, I think any contentious section should have a good bit on the media coverage surrounding it. I don't see that in this article, but maybe there are no contentious sections yet. The other thing I'd say is not really an article comment per se, but I think it would be helpful to have some sort of navigation box for all of these by the time you are done. --Jacqui ^★ 04:57, 28 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Cool. Maybe an email to the EFF or the ACLU may be in order for more material? - Ta bu shi da yu 09:02, 5 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]