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Uncharted 2: Among Thieves

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I've listed this article for peer review because It really has chances to become FA.

Thanks, Taro James (talk) 16:21, 21 January 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this interesting article. I think it would need a fair amount of work before it would stand a chance at WP:FAC, so here are some suggestions for improvement, with FAC in mind.

• The biggest problem this would face at FAC is a lack of references. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• Some of the refs are bare URLs, and/or do not have all the information needed. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• The External links tool in the Toolbox on this page finds multiple dead links and others that are potential problems - these would need to be fixed before FAC
• It is useful to have a model article for ideas and examples to follow - New Super Mario Bros. is a recent FA and may be a useful model
• The lead seems like it could be expanded per WP:LEAD
• The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself.
• My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, but this seems too short to do that - probably needs at least one more paragraph
• The article has a fair number of short (one or two sentence) paragraphs and sections which interrupt the flow. These should be combined with others or perhaps expanded in almost all cases
• There is one disambiguation link that needs to be fixed - see here
• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:20, 27 January 2011 (UTC)