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* "... causing it to resemble it as time goes on"??? ambiguous it
* ".. he is able to maintain his human form while using it." No clear mention that he changes forms from human to fox or vice versa. Confusing
* "... leaving Naruto without a family" what about his mother???? Confused
* Konoha/Konohagakure: stick to one spelling
* "... more chakra in the form of tails appears" ???
* "... the soul of his mother Kushina Uzumaki that has been within the seal." Shouldn't the mother be named when birth is mentioned?
* The article does not say what Part II is, where referred first time in " Naruto become a central conflict in Part II" No mention that they are manga.
* "...utterly unquestionable whether or not" questionable???
* "Throughout the beginning of the English dub version ..." From the beginning of the series/throughout the series??
* "She noted difficulties in voicing the character for the first [time] after " Missing word
* "Takeuchi met [with] hardship<s>s</s>" missing word and extra s
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* There is no clear boundary where Part I ends and Part II starts in Appearances.
* What about the anime appearances? Are they covered too? Not clear.
* "Description" is too abstract. May be you have a full-fledged section on "appearance". Describe his hair, costume (blue patches etc.), the head band (symbol on it), eye colour, shoes etc. How it changes from Part I to II, anime, video games.
* Naruto seems to use multiple fighting techniques. A detailed section on it is needed. [http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Naruto]
* "various stages of the demon fox's manifestation" : explain Naruto's non-human manifestations
* See [[Barbara Gordon]] for a good layout. Reorganize sections as "Appearance" (physical appearance), "Personality", "Life", "Abilities and fighting techniques", "Conception", "Reception".
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{{GATable/item|7|n|The articles needs a through copyedit and more clarity in the life summary. Include more manga as well as anime, video games related information, as suggested in 3a.
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Reviewer: Redtigerxyz (talk · contribs) 08:25, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • "... causing it to resemble it as time goes on"??? ambiguous it
  • ".. he is able to maintain his human form while using it." No clear mention that he changes forms from human to fox or vice versa. Confusing
  • "... leaving Naruto without a family" what about his mother???? Confused
  • Konoha/Konohagakure: stick to one spelling
  • "... more chakra in the form of tails appears" ???
  • "... the soul of his mother Kushina Uzumaki that has been within the seal." Shouldn't the mother be named when birth is mentioned?
  • The article does not say what Part II is, where referred first time in " Naruto become a central conflict in Part II" No mention that they are manga.
  • "...utterly unquestionable whether or not" questionable???
  • "Throughout the beginning of the English dub version ..." From the beginning of the series/throughout the series??
  • "She noted difficulties in voicing the character for the first [time] after " Missing word
  • "Takeuchi met [with] hardships" missing word and extra s
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Ref 39 is dead. Replace
2c. it contains no original research. [citation needed] added
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  • There is no clear boundary where Part I ends and Part II starts in Appearances.
  • What about the anime appearances? Are they covered too? Not clear.
  • "Description" is too abstract. May be you have a full-fledged section on "appearance". Describe his hair, costume (blue patches etc.), the head band (symbol on it), eye colour, shoes etc. How it changes from Part I to II, anime, video games.
  • Naruto seems to use multiple fighting techniques. A detailed section on it is needed. [1]
  • "various stages of the demon fox's manifestation" : explain Naruto's non-human manifestations
  • See Barbara Gordon for a good layout. Reorganize sections as "Appearance" (physical appearance), "Personality", "Life", "Abilities and fighting techniques", "Conception", "Reception".
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Infobox image needs a caption stating stating if it is from Part I or II. Add description on image page in fair use rationale.
7. Overall assessment. The articles needs a through copyedit and more clarity in the life summary. Include more manga as well as anime, video games related information, as suggested in 3a.
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