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This article seems to be written like an advertisement and not from a neutral point of view as required. Someone should correct the language in this article. [[Special:Contributions/45.27.58.77|45.27.58.77]] ([[User talk:45.27.58.77|talk]]) 15:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC) |
This article seems to be written like an advertisement and not from a neutral point of view as required. Someone should correct the language in this article. [[Special:Contributions/45.27.58.77|45.27.58.77]] ([[User talk:45.27.58.77|talk]]) 15:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC) |
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:Specifically, I think some of the language (e.g. "best part" and "most effective") should be changed and I think the endorsement section should be deleted or at least include what these organizations said about FoolProof instead of just describing the organizations. [[Special:Contributions/45.27.58.77|45.27.58.77]] ([[User talk:45.27.58.77|talk]]) 16:02, 28 April 2021 (UTC) |
:Specifically, I think some of the language (e.g. "best part" and "most effective") should be changed and I think the endorsement section should be deleted or at least include what these organizations said about FoolProof instead of just describing the organizations. [[Special:Contributions/45.27.58.77|45.27.58.77]] ([[User talk:45.27.58.77|talk]]) 16:02, 28 April 2021 (UTC) |
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::I went through the two references and found no mention of the endorsements, so I have added the unreferenced section template. If that section is to stay in, references should be added. [[Special:Contributions/45.27.58.77|45.27.58.77]] ([[User talk:45.27.58.77|talk]]) 18:21, 29 April 2021 (UTC) |
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This article seems to be written like an advertisement and not from a neutral point of view as required. Someone should correct the language in this article. 45.27.58.77 (talk) 15:40, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
- Specifically, I think some of the language (e.g. "best part" and "most effective") should be changed and I think the endorsement section should be deleted or at least include what these organizations said about FoolProof instead of just describing the organizations. 45.27.58.77 (talk) 16:02, 28 April 2021 (UTC)
- I went through the two references and found no mention of the endorsements, so I have added the unreferenced section template. If that section is to stay in, references should be added. 45.27.58.77 (talk) 18:21, 29 April 2021 (UTC)