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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jxc5/Charles_Lockwood

(Re-posting request) Please take a look at the article I created on my user space, regarding a historian, journalist - Charles Lockwood who's now known to be a Corporate Sustainability Strategist. I've tried to round up some references like newspaper articles, or other publications he's quoted on and links for notability purposes. I'm not really sure though if I'm headed in the right direction, or it would be approved for posting. Help please. I would truly appreciate your feedback. Thank you so much. Jxc5 (talk) 13:57, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

You've got a lot of information on that page! Nice. I think it needs to be organized a little more clearly though. A method I always use (on Wikipedia) is to find another topically close article to use as a model for whatever I'm writing about. I don't know any other "sustainability strategist" but I was looking at Ann Coulter's page (a political writer/columnist) to compare yours with. You might want to take a look at how the information on that page is ordered, and try to apply that to the article you're writing. You could pick any biography author biography about an author (is what I meant) to compare to--I just glanced at Coulter's real quick. I can give you a few pointers though...

• You might want to try and shorten the titles (and subtitles) of sections. When section titles are long, it makes the table of contents look jumbled (the first thing I noticed when I came to the page).
• More background information about his early life and personal life would add a lot to the article. The article presents a lot more information about his professional career than anything else as of right now.
• I don't think you need a subsection for each work he's written. It'd be better to format the prose in a flowing manner.
• Things need to flow a little more in the article. Writing things out in prose versus listing things.
• The "Research Projects and Articles" section is a bit lengthy... I know that Ann Coulter's page gives a "Bibliography" section, but this one on Lockwood's page seems a bit lengthy. It could be alright, but I'm just a little unsure if it should be included.
• Good job on providing many inline references. I'm not really sure what the "Secondary References" section is for. Did you use information from those sources in the article? If so, you should probably cite them. If its not information you used, you might want to remove those.

Overall good job. I think it needs a little more work until you move it into the mainspace as an article, but it won't take long at this point. You might want to check out "Your First Article" and "Writing Better Articles" to aid you. Killiondude (talk) 02:51, 11 January 2009 (UTC)

• Killiondude, thank you so much for your feedbacks. Very helpful! =) I've also sent a reply to your talkpage, requesting for some assistance with one problem I'm currently facing. =( Your extra help would truly be appreciated.Jxc5 (talk) 18:37, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Adding a company to a city list and poroviding their contact info

I am trying to find a way to add a company to the city of Houston Texas, I thought I did it but when I finsihed it was deleted. Please direct me to how I can add the company to a city list and add their description.

Many Thanks....Oldcommguy —Preceding unsigned comment added by Oldcommguy (talk • contribs) 16:37, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

I'll respond on your talk page. This feedback page is a forum to request and give feedback on articles. Killiondude (talk) 20:32, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

There's a common misconception that because it's free-of-charge to edit on Wikipedia, that a business can add links to itself wherever it likes. Actually, Wikipedia is owned by a group that forbids external links to businesses in many cases. From your editing history, adding links to www.xangati.com and www.lovemytool.com to many articles, you are doing precisely what Wikipedia disallows. I understand this may be a disappointment, but Wikipedia is not a promotional platform. I notice most of your edits have been reverted. What you should not do at this point is continue to add those external links. Instead, consider other ways you might contribute to the encyclopedia. Regards, Piano non troppo (talk) 09:45, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

Redgrave and Lopham Fen

Over the last month I have heavily edited this article. As this is the first article I have been a major contributor towards I would appreciate any advice on how to improve it. Thanks. HelioSmith (talk) 18:58, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

What you added is interesting and well-written. My concern that you might be using Wikipedia to further a political agenda, however, was strengthened by your heavy use of www.suffolkwildlife.com as a reference. This leaves the material open to getting an WP:NPOV tag, or perhaps even being deleted entirely by someone who disagrees. Since being neutral is one of Wikipedia's three core content polities, it would be better to recast some of your language slightly so that it is clear that the text is expressing a particular (perhaps very common) point-of-view.

This sentence is a example of *beginning* to depart from Wiki guidelines: "In 1961 the Suffolk Wildlife Trust gained control of the site but limited resources meant the large scale work required couldn't be carried out." If I was a detractor of the Trust, I'd question what "limited resources" meant, and especially what "large scale work required" meant. Required to accomplish what goal? Is there any upper limit for how much money the Trust would be willing to spend? Do all the locals agree about the goals?

Again, just a tad more caution would be appropriate. Overall, yours seems like a very worthwhile contribution. Regards, Piano non troppo (talk) 09:26, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

Auburn Tigers swimming and diving

I created this page a while ago and have been expanding it and editing from time to time. It'd like to improve it and at least get it past "Start Class" but would like outside input. Further, someone put a NPOV tag on it, but would not explain their reasoning behind it on the talk page. Any input would be appreciated. AUburnTiger (talk) 00:55, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Nice article! An anon IP put that tag there almost a year ago (from the history log). I think it is safe to remove it since they didn't post any reason why on the talk page. The article is probably very close to C-Class per WP:ASSESS. I have a few pointers for the article that will definitely get it there, and probably closer to B-Class.

• The lead needs to be expanded as well as referenced. If you have references for that information later on in the article (which it should, because the lead is supposed to just summarize the article), it'd be easy to fix this. See WP:LEAD if you haven't already.
• A good rule of thumb is to have at least one reference for each paragraph. I noticed that in the history section, there is only one reference in the whole section (and its closer to the end of the section). If all that info comes from that one source, just reference each paragraph to it. Also, more referencing throughout the article is probably needed. If all the info comes from the references already given, it should probably reflect that then.
• The article needs a little more wikilinking in general. I might help out a little with this if I get more time.
• Under the table in the "Summer Olympic Games Beijing 2008" section there is a reference, but it is all by itself. I'm guessing this is for the table? I don't really know a lot about working with wikitables, but I know that reference looks a little funny all by itself. List of National Historic Landmarks in California has the reference at the top of a column that just has numbers there, check that out and maybe a few other "List" pages to see how they include references in tables. Also, in that same table, for Mark Gangloff there is a ")" under the "Silver(s)" column. Just a typo :-)
• In the table titled "Auburn Tiger Team NCAA National Championships", the color might be a little too dark (it may be difficult to read for some viewers).

Don't be daunted by the list I just made. No article is ever completely perfect (see the last bullet in WP:PERFECT). All in all, there's a lot of valuable information in the page. Nice job on it. Killiondude (talk) 18:38, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Thanks, I did a lot of your suggestions. AUburnTiger (talk) 20:33, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

how do i get this published so my family can search for it and find it?

William Sorenson. Bill Sorenson.

linkedin, geocities, myspace, facebook.

The Great Seattle Snow Storm of 2008 is no match for the Minnesota Snow Storm of 1980/81. All you need is cable chains and you can get anywhere.

The Great Seattle Snow Storm of 2004 doesn't compare the the Minnesota Snow Storm of 1980/81....(-)57 degrees below zero.

Two Red-Winged Blackbirds We, Nestling In A Nearby Tree, Oh How Happy We Will Be, Chee, Chee, Chee. (From a Plaque in Magnesun Park at Sandpoint, in Seattle)

Love; Listen...to each other, Overlook...the faults, Value...each other, Encourage...each other.

Love is when you know what will hurt someone, but instead of doing that you do what will please them.

Be careful of your thoughts, for your thoughts become your words. Be careful of your deeds, for your deeds become your habits. Be careful of your habits, for your habits become your character. Be careful of your character, for your character becomes your destiny.

As good as I can, as long as I can, to the best of my abilities.

http://www.geocities.com/wtsorenson —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wtsyes (talk • contribs) 04:43, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Hi! Welcome to Wikipedia. This is an encyclopedia, and as such we keep only encyclopedic information. There are many wikis elsewhere that hold many different kinds of things. You should try searching for those if you'd like to "publish" something like what you've written above, because Wikipedia is not a web host. Killiondude (talk) 17:46, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

How do I post an article

I have written an article and cannot find a set of instructions that implicitly state how to submit an article. Here is the article text:

I'm going to move all that to Joe Graham. He should meet notability requirements. Killiondude (talk) 06:37, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

If you can provide any assistance as to the specific URLs I need to use or the process involved, I'd greatly appreciate it. A search of Wikipedia provides lots of hints but no concrete results.

Thank You

US Cable News

I created this article from scratch. It's my first created article. I know I made a lot of mistakes. I would appreciate some contructive criticism. Thanks. --Mapple001 (talk) 00:13, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

User:GregoryCouratier/Sandbox

Hello,

Could someone tell me if my article is appropriate for the mainspace ? I tried to use a NPOV, and took into account that Wikipedia is an encyclopedia and not an advertising website. To me the article is just information. Please tell me if I should modify it and how so that it can be published.

Thanks

GregoryCouratier (talk) 19:27, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

John Etnier

Requesting feedback on new page John Etnier. In particular, I'm a bit stumped as to why the infobox shows no colored bars for title and background information, but any feedback at all is much appreciated.

I hope it isn't too awfully outré to create what is essentially an autographical page. I tried to keep POV very neutral.

Thanks!

Etnier (talk) 22:44, 24 January 2009 (UTC)