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Jeff Stitely is an international award-winning jazz drummer and leader of The Stitely Orchestra. Aside from leading the Stitely Orchestra and running his business "Stitely Entertainment," Jeff is currently a Ravinia Jazz mentor teaching and performing for Chicago Public School students.

Biography

Early Life

Jeff started on a musical path at a young age by winning All State Competitions from ages 8 on. Jeff attended University of Illinois in Champagne to study classical percussion. Jeff has toured internationally with his own jazz quartet and with Chicago jazz icon Patricia Barber. Jeff and his Jazz Quartet recorded 3 CDs, the first of which was awarded "Top 10 Jazz CDS of the Year" by WBEZ & The Chicago Sun Times.

Since moving to Chicago in 1984, Jeff has performed with many great jazz, pop and classical musicians such as, Chick Corea, Wynton Marsalis, Randy Brecker, Eddie Harris, Larry Coryell, “Groove” Holmes, Kathleen Battle, Zoot Sims, Patricia Barber, Von Freeman, Bobby Shew, Bobby Lewis, Ed Peterson, Chicago Symphony’s “Gershwin-Bernstein Ensemble”, Grant Park Symphony, Sinfonieta and Fulcrumpoint.

Ventures

A transformational event in Jeff Stitely's career was when he got the opportunity to study and perform African drumming and dance with Ghanaian master drummer Gideon Foli Alorwoyie for five years. This venerable musical tradition is rooted in tribal rituals surrounding weddings, harvests and initiations. The music was performed to fill these celebrations with rapturous joy. It was in that same spirit that Jeff decided to start "Stitely Entertainment" in 1994, to bring Joy to celebrations.

"Stitely Entertainment" is a company located in Evanston, IL that manages four bands (The Stitely Orchestra, 312 Chicago, Chicago Groove Collective, and the Alan Gresik Swing Shift Orchestra) and provides work for over 80 musicians. "Stitely Entartainment" is owned and managed by jeff Stitely along with five employees and an internship program. "Stitely Entertainment" has been selected to The Knot "Best of Weddings" magazine for both 2008 and 2009.

Stitely Orchestra

The Stitely Orchestra is a 14-piece dance band led by Jeff Stitely. The band's diverse repertoire includes indie, contemporary, rock, R&B, funk, Motown, disco, Big Band, jazz, swing, ethnic, and other music. The Stitely Orchestra prforms throughout the U.S. Among the Venues it has performed at are the House of Blues, Navy Pier and Soldier Field. Some of Stitely Orchestra's past clients include the U.S. Olympic Committee, Australian Consulate, Northwestern University and such Fortune 500 companies as IBM, Kraft and Ford. The Stitely Orchestra performs at more than 140 events a year at every type of occasion ranging from weddings to corporate events.

Discography

1. Chameleon Eyes (1993)
2. All Things Equal (1996)
3. Ennead (1996)

Awards & Accomplishments

• Jeff was the Winner of the Best Soloist Award at the 9th International Jazz Competition of Belgium
• "Top 10 Jazz CDS of the Year" by WBEZ & The Chicago Sun Times
• Awarded two National Endowment for the Arts grants

References

Mu$ic123 (talk) 21:51, 18 June 2009 (UTC)

Your article is not quite ready for the mainspace yet. The prose is pretty much all set, the main problem are the references. There are no secondary sources to verify the information in the article, since the only source you provided was the orchestra's own website. Please find outside sources that show the notability of this person. Keep up the good writing, Fingerz 09:34, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

hello everyone!I heard of this page and thought maybe someone could help me here.I'm looking for a Canadian band i think they are and they are call Wireless,they came out in the late 70s early 80s i think,and i think they came out of Ontariobut again i'm not sure.I remember seeing them with Rush for their Hemispheres tour,maybe that could help.

Thanks in advance Steve —Preceding unsigned comment added by Panshovelsteve (talk • contribs) 22:54, 19 June 2009 (UTC)

Hello, you seem to be in the wrong place. Please go to the reference desk for knowledge questions. Thanks, Fingerz 09:34, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Addition to "New Orleans" posting

Under "Media" heading, please add OffBeat Magazine, which has been a print publication and website that focuses on the New Orleans and Louisiana music scene since 1988.

New Mercies Christian Church lilburn, GA - Senior Pastor Jesse Curney, III

I am requesting feedback on this page. It is up for speedy delete and I don't kow what I need to change to remove that criteria. --Marketingnmcc (talk) 20:54, 24 June 2009 (UTC)—User has been blocked indefinitely Fingerz 14:16, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

User:Bynaural/Crosstalk

I know it's lacking in a lot of information, but that is just the premise - currently. I still have to wait for a response on using a picture, etc.
I still have, yet, to add the External Links and wanted to worry about that last. Thanks!--Bynaural (talk) 10:33, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

Hello, your article still has a bit of a way to go before it is ready for the mainspace. First, you need to add sources to verify the information that you put in the article. Sources such as the journal's website can be used, but to establish notability, you are going to need secondary sources, sources independent of the journal, that show the journal is notable enough for inclusion. Hopes this helps, Fingerz 09:15, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Scamhag

A woman who posts information in a sexual or men wanted context in an attempt to lure men into subscribing to a dating or other service that alludes to an introduction of a woman who may be interested in the subscriber.

Please see Wikipedia's policy on neologisms. Note that Wikipedia is not for things made up one day. Unless you provide secondary sources showing the notability of the phrase, the article will have no chance of surviving in wikipedia. Regards, Fingerz 09:18, 30 June 2009 (UTC)

Dominant white

Dominant white in horses is a group of related coat color/pattern conditions which are all part of an allelic series on a particular gene. I'd like to make this article more accessible to people who are not horse-people or genetics/molecular biology people. Countercanter (talk) 19:19, 30 June 2009 (UTC)