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The Press Thornton Future Masters

Droy1289 (talk) 00:49, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

BannerHill

GaryLindblad (talk) 00:53, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Luminescent solar concentrators

Hi, I have sent the request 1 June and I am just resending the request. This page has already been peer reviewed, I just would like remove the "unreviewed article" tag. Kindly let me know what I have to do. Thank you very much. Levita.lev (talk) 05:23, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Coolavokig/Ballymanus_mine_disaster

started new page on this 1943 disaster which is again topical as it was raised in Dáil Éireann this week http://www.irishtimes.com/newspaper/ireland/2011/0609/1224298640928.html

Coolavokig (talk) 06:53, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Hungrybags/Hungrybags

Hungrybags (talk) 13:46, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Charles Harrison McNutt

Could I post an image of Charles McNutt from his faculty page on the University of Memphis's website? And if so how could I upload the image to Wikipedia to insert the file onto the article?

Najamirah (talk) 16:15, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

The Gores Group

Would appreciate a quick review.

Thanks!

Serickson3 (talk) 16:17, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

User:ReidPeterson/Guenter Klose My first article.

Seeking feedback for my first article to ensure it meets Wikipedia's standards.

ReidPeterson (talk) 16:54, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

User:UPittIT/D-Scribe Digital Publishing

This is what I posted on May 12 (I'm new to this, so I'm not sure if that's linked readily for editors): Greetings, I work in the IT department at the University of Pittsburgh. We have a resource known as D-Scribe, which provides free and open access to many valuable materials - mostly historical items and journals that have been digitized and cataloged. We simply want to increase the awareness and availability of these resources, which is why we created a Wikipedia page. Since we are not trying to achieve financial gains, I do not believe I possess a conflict of interest. This is my first time building a Wikipedia page, so I am interested in feedback regarding the construction of the page. Initially my boss wanted me to create a separate Wikipedia page for every single individual collection in our system, but I opted to create one main page listing everything available from D-Scribe. Should I also create separate pages for each collection? Also, by the nature of this material it is very difficult to find sources confirming what I wrote that exist outside the scope of the University of Pittsburgh. I did, however, attempt to link to other Wikipedia pages whenever possible. If this is not an acceptable method, what suggestions have you for otherwise verifying this highly specialized material? If there is anything wrong with this page, please just let me know and do not simply delete it. Like I said, I'm new to this. Anything wrong was probably done out of ignorance and not malice. Thank you for your time, Jourdan

Since then, I have cleaned up the appearance of the page significantly, adding a lead paragraph and a table of contents. The entry will remain one article, except for the academic journals, which will get their own pages in the future. I removed all external links from the article and collected them at the bottom. I added several external sources. Is the article ready to be published?

Thank you,

Jourdan UPittIT (talk) 17:18, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Untitled please add to Castro Valley High School Noted Alumni" Lalita Tademy author from Oprah's book club

24.205.200.240 (talk) 17:27, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

ScholarMatch

I am working on an article about a San Francisco-based nonprofit organization. My questions are about formatting the references: I have read the tutorials, used the wizard, and checked other sources, but I cannot figure out how to format my references correctly. All of the information is in the article and down in the references section. I could really use some help with that.

Also, I just want to ensure that I've included enough information on the subject, so that it's completely clear what the organization is/does. Any suggestions regarding expanding or clarifying the content are welcome. Thanks!

Sch0larmatch (talk) 18:37, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Richard Percival Lister Any criticism welcome, but I would like to remove the "Unreviewed" tag. Thanks.

Any criticism welcome, but I would like to remove the "Unreviewed" tag. Thanks.

JonRichfield (talk) 18:43, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

OK, some general feedback. In general, well done, notably lots of reliable sources. You can never have too many but it's solid to my eye. And hundreds of poems published in the New Yorker, the Atlantic and Punch, plus many books, seems notable.

Some picky suggestions:
--You don't need colons after section headings
--don't capitalize B in born in the lede
--I would rephrase the lede something like "RP Lister, born 1914 is a writer, poet and artist. He previously worked as a metallurgist."
-- The distinction between pre- and post-WW2 seems artificial. I would move his marriage to the first part and rename it as Personal Life or something like that, and make the second part "Career." (I realize that metallurgy was also a career of his but it is not why he is notable.)
-- "Recognitions and activities" -- the honor should go in its own section, along with any other honors he may have won. The rest of this section should go in his career section. Also, what is an FRSL? I think you should explain what that acronym stands for.
-- in the painting section I would reword it to start out "Since 1980, he has focused on painting ,though he still writes poems occasionally."

Hope that's not too many little criticism. Nice job!
I don't know what the protocol is on these new reviews, whether this opinion qualifies you to remove that tag or not. Anybody? Msalt (talk) 19:36, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Ruthie Berman and Connie Kurtz

It would be nice if somebody could review my new article Ruthie Berman and Connie Kurtz. Thanks. Dante8 (talk) 19:54, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

Lois Gould

Please review my article Lois Gould. Thanks.

Dante8 (talk) 20:40, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Jurov17/Abbey Sozan

Please review my article User:Jurov17/Abbey Sozan. I am not sure whether my english is good enough.

Jurov17 (talk) 21:05, 9 June 2011 (UTC)

The Caravan (magazine)

It is not copyrighted material but just information taken from the magazine's website. It is neutral in nature. The Coren Search Bot has sent an error message. Please give feedback.

Miss remiss (talk) 00:19, 10 June 2011 (UTC)