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I added the course banner. [[User:BerikG|BerikG]] ([[User talk:BerikG|talk]]) 15:21, 19 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG
I added the course banner. [[User:BerikG|BerikG]] ([[User talk:BerikG|talk]]) 15:21, 19 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

==Required Peer Review==
The intro section seems to have many long, possibly run-on, sentences that are possibly missing comas or can be broken down. Maybe just an evaluation of sentence structure. The history section is addressing the history in other countries/regions and not in Eastern European regions. I would suggest a brief one paragraph on the external history and more elaborate information on the history of sex trafficking in the specific region. In the causes section the sub-section poverty has a few sentence structure problems. I would suggest elaborating more on militarization, just what the term means and many dates. In this year or with this war. The recruitment, consequences, and Prevalence sections also have a few sentence structural/grammatical issues that need to be read through and corrected. Besides the grammar issues and, I would suggest, citations in some places, the article is very informative. The section separations makes it much easier to read. [[User:Teashias|Teashias]] ([[User talk:Teashias|talk]]) 04:48, 23 April 2012 (UTC)

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I added the course banner. BerikG (talk) 15:21, 19 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG[reply]

Required Peer Review

The intro section seems to have many long, possibly run-on, sentences that are possibly missing comas or can be broken down. Maybe just an evaluation of sentence structure. The history section is addressing the history in other countries/regions and not in Eastern European regions. I would suggest a brief one paragraph on the external history and more elaborate information on the history of sex trafficking in the specific region. In the causes section the sub-section poverty has a few sentence structure problems. I would suggest elaborating more on militarization, just what the term means and many dates. In this year or with this war. The recruitment, consequences, and Prevalence sections also have a few sentence structural/grammatical issues that need to be read through and corrected. Besides the grammar issues and, I would suggest, citations in some places, the article is very informative. The section separations makes it much easier to read. Teashias (talk) 04:48, 23 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]