Talk:Water supply and women in developing countries

I added the course banner. It would be good to start (carry on) the discussion of questions on this Talk page. BerikG (talk) 15:44, 19 April 2012 (UTC)BerikG

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Hi Bryan, as prof. Berik mentioned today in class, your article stands short of the minimum word requirement, so you definitely need to add more headings and text in your article. I would suggest that you should discuss the history of colonialism and imperialism, and how it kept the infrastructure in developing countries backward and primitive. Moreover, you can discuss the contemporary economic policies of development which are not addressing the core problems, like we saw in the video on Senegal, where private French corporations have overtaken the water supply of the country, and it had adverse effects on the lives of women. Furthermore, you can raise the point that it is gender division of labor which has been internalized by the developing countries, hence, only women perform these kinds of labor. You have picked a very interesting topic, I am looking forward to read your final version. Dkhan2012 (talk) 22:02, 24 April 2012 (UTC)Dkhan2012

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Bryan, so far I think you have a good article. It is an interesting topic and there is some really good information in there. There were just a few grammatical things I found like proper punctuation with the references. Two that I noticed were for reference #2 and #8. It would be a good idea to just re-read with that in mind. Also, there were a couple sentences that were a little confusing. In your "Inclusion" section, the last sentence is a little lengthy and could benefit form some re-structuring to make it easier to understand. I also think this section could benefit form some more information to help with your overall word requirement and to help explain "women in planning". One other sentence in the "Malawi" section; "Women in Malawi have also initiative" doesn't quite make sense. Overall, I think you have done a nice job with the article. It just wouldn't hurt to have a little more information throughout. I look forward to seeing the completed version. Alainas (talk) 15:50, 24 April 2012 (UTC)Alainas

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The overall article was well written and informational this issue is very controversial and difficult to cover on Wikipedia. I thought you did a nice job of making sure everything was cited. The article was short I liked the specific examples of water supply in developing countries. It would be exciting to see more examples in the article. I think it would be interesting to see what countries have the biggest problem with women and the water supply. It might be very controversial but you might want to call the big corporations out on their schemes, I watched a documentary and there are only a few corporations in the world who handle all of the privatized water. Its a long shot but it would be very informative.Schmitt.ginny (talk) 03:36, 25 April 2012 (UTC)