Talk:Desert pupfish

Major edits on 3 Oct 2013

Major edits were made to this organism page for a term assignment (see banner).

In the first of at least two major overhauls, I added on large section title "Biology and ecology." This section incorporates the previous "Biology" section and expands upon it greatly.

Additions of note:

• Motor patterns
• Reproductive behavior
• Feeding
• 10 respectable sources

Additions/expansions needed:

• Extreme conditions (working title)

• needs much more information and a better title ("Survival in extreme conditions"?)

• Breeding
• Aggression
• Habitat
• Description
• Management factors

Also required:

• complete overhaul of previous sources
• additional images
• chart for mating behavior (need permission from Barlow)

Bakerb4379 (talk) 07:54, 3 October 2013 (UTC)

General Suggestions on Major Edits

The heading "Biology and ecology" could be changed to "Behavior and Ecology".

In the motor patterns section describing tilting and nipping, you might want to link or explain what you mean by substrate.

The information about sexual preferences, canabalism, and nest parasitism could be put under the reproduction heading. The "Reproduction" section could be renamed "Reproduction and Parenting Behavior". — Preceding unsigned comment added by Batoburen (talk • contribs) 22:12, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Edit summary and comments on Major edits

• I changed "somewhat" to "seemingly."
• Motor Patterns section can be improved by changing the organization. While bullet points are effective for providing a list of elements, the list of motor patterns is not as informative as the context in which each motor pattern occurs. The information in the Motor Patterns section can better be explained in a paragraph that describe which behavior they are involved in or what the significance is. Grouping them into different behaviors they are related to, such as foraging and reproduction, would also help.
• Motor patterns related to reproduction are repeated in the Reproduction section. Allasse0927 (talk) 22:01, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

Major edits on 24 Oct 2013

In an ongoing attempt to bring this article to GA status, I have added the following:

• Taxonomy and phylogeny
• Breeding
• Extreme conditions
• Various images
• Sources

I have also rewritten/changed:

• Description
• Habitat and distribution
• Management factors
• Previous source.

I have relocated

• Diet

Possible areas of further improvement:

• Add more images, specifically of mating
• Perhaps remove motor patterns and embed those definitions within the Mating section. If so, it would allow for the relocation of Breeding above Mating.
• Make a distribution map. I am unsure if this is necessary, as I have added a distribution map form USGS, though it does not match the maps of other GA (I.e. one like this)
• I have not evaluated the introductory summary at all.

Bakerb4379 (talk) 22:44, 24 October 2013 (UTC)