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'''Secondary Review:''' Very very well written! Such an interesting topic- you guys got lucky! I really like the explanation of the difference between dizziness and vertigo- it seemed very relevant. The diagnosis paragraph was also very well written. The images fit the article very nicely. References look good. The only thing Id recommend is proof reading again, some senteces are run-on or improper and put a ":" before you list things (ex. Some such symptoms that may accompany vertiginous epilepsy include:.)[[User:Sheldon92|Sheldon92]] ([[User talk:Sheldon92|talk]]) 21:23, 6 April 2014 (UTC) |
'''Secondary Review:''' Very very well written! Such an interesting topic- you guys got lucky! I really like the explanation of the difference between dizziness and vertigo- it seemed very relevant. The diagnosis paragraph was also very well written. The images fit the article very nicely. References look good. The only thing Id recommend is proof reading again, some senteces are run-on or improper and put a ":" before you list things (ex. Some such symptoms that may accompany vertiginous epilepsy include:.)[[User:Sheldon92|Sheldon92]] ([[User talk:Sheldon92|talk]]) 21:23, 6 April 2014 (UTC) |
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Overall, i think the article is very well-written. The information is explained in relatively simple terms that anyone with no background on this topic can read through and get a good understanding of it. Also, I appreciate the research section as it gives information on how relevant this topic is. Finally, I appreciate that you guys came up with a couple of images to provide visual help. All in all, I think this article is very good. Good job. |
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This topic is being edited as an assignment in an undergraduate neurobiology course. The course is participating in the Wikipedia Education Program. The revised article will be posted by March 24, 2014. MissKell (talk) 01:32, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
Editing this page as part of Marquette Neurobiology assignment. MUhelb (talk) 23:50, 23 March 2014 (UTC)
Secondary Review: Overall, I think your article explains vertiginous epilepsy very well. The article describes the main categories that I would be interested in if I wanted to learn more about this. I do have a few recommendations. I would recommend starting your article with things that vertiginous epilepsy does do, instead of what it does not do. Also, the second paragraph in the mechanism section seems to apply more to the history section of your article. In the causes section of the article, you explain that traumatic head injuries could be a cause of the seizures. I think that is very interesting. Is there any information that could explain how this occurs physiologically? If possible, I think expanding on the causes section would be very interesting and helpful for readers. I like that you differentiated between vertigo and dizziness. I feel like that clears up some common misconceptions that most people may have. I also really like the different pictures you used, especially the video of the Optokinetic Nystagmus. The video helps make the symptoms more realistic to people who are used to reading text only. Overall, I really like the layout and content of your article, it flows really well. Great work! KPhillips13 (talk) 04:41, 27 March 2014 (UTC)
I think this page is very well put together and well organized. I'm actually surprised there wasn't a page prior to this on this subject. I really like the way everything was laid out and the organization of the topic headings. I also really liked the image you have of the optokinetic hystagmus and how its a moving image- very cool. Great job! 8466jacoba (talk) 23:26, 25 March 2014 (UTC)
Marquette Neurobiology Reviewer: As vertiginous epilepsy is a relatively rare type of epilepsy there are few secondary sources covering it. Therefore our article contains several non-secondary sources. Thank you for your consideration during your review. MUhelb (talk) 13:36, 26 March 2014 (UTC)
Overall, this is great! The grammar may need some work, but the actual content of the article is superb. There were many different facets and provided a very good overview of vertiginous epilepsy. I'm with the previous reviewer, I can't believe there wasn't a page for this already. Great job guys. JamesBond34 (talk) 00:38, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
Secondary Review: Very very well written! Such an interesting topic- you guys got lucky! I really like the explanation of the difference between dizziness and vertigo- it seemed very relevant. The diagnosis paragraph was also very well written. The images fit the article very nicely. References look good. The only thing Id recommend is proof reading again, some senteces are run-on or improper and put a ":" before you list things (ex. Some such symptoms that may accompany vertiginous epilepsy include:.)Sheldon92 (talk) 21:23, 6 April 2014 (UTC)
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Overall, i think the article is very well-written. The information is explained in relatively simple terms that anyone with no background on this topic can read through and get a good understanding of it. Also, I appreciate the research section as it gives information on how relevant this topic is. Finally, I appreciate that you guys came up with a couple of images to provide visual help. All in all, I think this article is very good. Good job.
Thank you,