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:And the article would be alot more comprehensive if there were more reliable, verifiable sources talking about Russian prisons. [[User:Int21h|Int21h]] ([[User talk:Int21h|talk]]) 04:21, 27 February 2015 (UTC) |
:And the article would be alot more comprehensive if there were more reliable, verifiable sources talking about Russian prisons. [[User:Int21h|Int21h]] ([[User talk:Int21h|talk]]) 04:21, 27 February 2015 (UTC) |
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Hi [[User:Hhoover42|Hhoover42]]--this looks great so far! The new information you’ve added is very readable, and the links provided are helpful. The primary edit I would suggest is to add a subsection title called “Contributing factors” (or something similar) right before paragraph two of the MDR-TB section. The information that follows seems to all fit into that category, and just naming that subsection would make it easier to read (I’m not saying you need to add any more information to this subsection). It could also be good to include a proposed solutions section or a policy section, if you think that is relevant to the topic. What are people proposing to do to fix the problem, or what are they already doing to fix it? |
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In addition, I think there are some places where you cite the author’s name of a source in the line where it may not be necessary. I would look over all the author names and make sure each is important. If there are too many author names cited inline, it can impede readability, I think. |
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[[User:Saw329|Saw329]] ([[User talk:Saw329|talk]]) 01:28, 31 March 2015 (UTC) |
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I find it very disturbing and inhumane with some of Russia's prison treatments. I understand the blindfolding in Black Dolphin prison, as it is reasonable and acceptable, but on the other note, I discorn the conditions. Things such as diseases and sickness, overpopulation, starvation, suffication, disgusting atmosphere, urine aroma, etc. They should at least allow them to wash their jumpsuits on a day- to- day basis and have CLEAN living arrangments. Another thing that disturbs me is the thought that they often get disconnected from family, as it is too far or too expensive to travel to see their inprisoned loved one, and really, no phone calls? 2 Hour visits ONCE a year? If the family is too far away or not in good financial state to travel sometimes many a days' worth, they should allow they inmate to use Skype to feel connected to loved ones. |
I find it very disturbing and inhumane with some of Russia's prison treatments. I understand the blindfolding in Black Dolphin prison, as it is reasonable and acceptable, but on the other note, I discorn the conditions. Things such as diseases and sickness, overpopulation, starvation, suffication, disgusting atmosphere, urine aroma, etc. They should at least allow them to wash their jumpsuits on a day- to- day basis and have CLEAN living arrangments. Another thing that disturbs me is the thought that they often get disconnected from family, as it is too far or too expensive to travel to see their inprisoned loved one, and really, no phone calls? 2 Hour visits ONCE a year? If the family is too far away or not in good financial state to travel sometimes many a days' worth, they should allow they inmate to use Skype to feel connected to loved ones. |
Revision as of 01:29, 31 March 2015
MDR-TB in Russian prisons
Multi-drug-resistant tuberculosis has rapidly spread within Russian prisons in the past few decades. This is largely the consequence of poor prison conditions, ineffective treatment, and prisoner demographics. I intend to discuss this phenomena in a contribution to this article. I will go into detail about how prison conditions are enabling the disease to spread rapidly and why infected individuals have especially poor outcomes. I will also discuss current procedures and policies surrounding this occurrence, as well as proposed interventions. I would love input on how to best maintain a neutral tone throughout the contribution. Additionally, any expansion within the existing article would be greatly appreciated; my contribution would seem a lot less out of place if the article was more comprehensive.
Hhoover42 (talk) 01:48, 27 February 2015 (UTC)
- Just properly attribute any inflammatory claims to their sources, don't just put forward the inflammatory claims like they're a forgone conclusion. For example, you wouldn't just put "Putin is a villain", you would put "most talking heads on Western television say Putin is a villain". The source of a claim is important.
- And the article would be alot more comprehensive if there were more reliable, verifiable sources talking about Russian prisons. Int21h (talk) 04:21, 27 February 2015 (UTC)
Feedback for MDR-TB edits
Hi Hhoover42--this looks great so far! The new information you’ve added is very readable, and the links provided are helpful. The primary edit I would suggest is to add a subsection title called “Contributing factors” (or something similar) right before paragraph two of the MDR-TB section. The information that follows seems to all fit into that category, and just naming that subsection would make it easier to read (I’m not saying you need to add any more information to this subsection). It could also be good to include a proposed solutions section or a policy section, if you think that is relevant to the topic. What are people proposing to do to fix the problem, or what are they already doing to fix it?
In addition, I think there are some places where you cite the author’s name of a source in the line where it may not be necessary. I would look over all the author names and make sure each is important. If there are too many author names cited inline, it can impede readability, I think. Saw329 (talk) 01:28, 31 March 2015 (UTC)
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I find it very disturbing and inhumane with some of Russia's prison treatments. I understand the blindfolding in Black Dolphin prison, as it is reasonable and acceptable, but on the other note, I discorn the conditions. Things such as diseases and sickness, overpopulation, starvation, suffication, disgusting atmosphere, urine aroma, etc. They should at least allow them to wash their jumpsuits on a day- to- day basis and have CLEAN living arrangments. Another thing that disturbs me is the thought that they often get disconnected from family, as it is too far or too expensive to travel to see their inprisoned loved one, and really, no phone calls? 2 Hour visits ONCE a year? If the family is too far away or not in good financial state to travel sometimes many a days' worth, they should allow they inmate to use Skype to feel connected to loved ones. 173.213.180.119 (talk) 17:07, 21 January 2013 (UTC)The Assassin