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Amjad I liked your Wiki draft. I do think adding a diagram that shows the process by which fog is created will help the reader. Additionally, I think it would be interesting if you could focus on the technologies used to extract water from desert air. Aside from those two possible additions, you can also try to spend more time on explaining in more depth he family of plants and general categorization animals that live in fog deserts. |
Amjad I liked your Wiki draft. I do think adding a diagram that shows the process by which fog is created will help the reader. Additionally, I think it would be interesting if you could focus on the technologies used to extract water from desert air. Aside from those two possible additions, you can also try to spend more time on explaining in more depth he family of plants and general categorization animals that live in fog deserts. |
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== Harley Peer Review == |
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Hey Amjad, |
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I thought your proposed wiki edit is very cool, I have never heard of Desert Fog so its a cool concept to learn about! |
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Very unbiased and to the point, especially with frog information. |
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However, I don't entirely see how this article relates to Development and the Environment (I get the enviro part but how does it connect to development)? Are people planning on using these areas for anthropogenic uses thus endangering this cycle? |
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Your intext citation is spot on. |
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'''Overall, very informative. However, could add more thematic topics that go along with our class!''' |
Revision as of 07:28, 22 November 2017
Tracy's Peer Edit:
Amjad I liked your Wiki draft. I do think adding a diagram that shows the process by which fog is created will help the reader. Additionally, I think it would be interesting if you could focus on the technologies used to extract water from desert air. Aside from those two possible additions, you can also try to spend more time on explaining in more depth he family of plants and general categorization animals that live in fog deserts.
Harley Peer Review
Hey Amjad,
I thought your proposed wiki edit is very cool, I have never heard of Desert Fog so its a cool concept to learn about!
Very unbiased and to the point, especially with frog information.
However, I don't entirely see how this article relates to Development and the Environment (I get the enviro part but how does it connect to development)? Are people planning on using these areas for anthropogenic uses thus endangering this cycle?
Your intext citation is spot on.
Overall, very informative. However, could add more thematic topics that go along with our class!