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In the beginning of your article, you should probably clarify what you're talking about. "This type of migration is called forced migration" what type of migration? I also see a a few grammatical mistakes, I believe it should be advanced not advance. Also, some of your language is not very encyclopedic; some of the statements you make look like personal value judgments, such as "now it's easier than ever". You should also clarify if you plan to make this a new section or add to an existing section. Other than that, I do like the ideas that you want to add, like the socioeconomic causes of migration. |
In the beginning of your article, you should probably clarify what you're talking about. "This type of migration is called forced migration" what type of migration? I also see a a few grammatical mistakes, I believe it should be advanced not advance. Also, some of your language is not very encyclopedic; some of the statements you make look like personal value judgments, such as "now it's easier than ever". You should also clarify if you plan to make this a new section or add to an existing section. Other than that, I do like the ideas that you want to add, like the socioeconomic causes of migration. |
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You have a good start on what you're going to add for your article. You talk about the issues that can arise with Net Migration, but you should also add in the benefits as well. Also, I would recommend adding in a real life example of a country experiencing a major form of net migration. Overall, you have a good start. Your addition has a encyclopedic tone and is grammatically correct.[[User:Nguyenandrew|Nguyenandrew]] ([[User talk:Nguyenandrew|talk]]) 23:55, 2 April 2018 (UTC)Nguyenandrew |
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AustenCis Peer Review
[edit]In the beginning of your article, you should probably clarify what you're talking about. "This type of migration is called forced migration" what type of migration? I also see a a few grammatical mistakes, I believe it should be advanced not advance. Also, some of your language is not very encyclopedic; some of the statements you make look like personal value judgments, such as "now it's easier than ever". You should also clarify if you plan to make this a new section or add to an existing section. Other than that, I do like the ideas that you want to add, like the socioeconomic causes of migration.
Nguyenandrew's Review for AustenCis
You have a good start on what you're going to add for your article. You talk about the issues that can arise with Net Migration, but you should also add in the benefits as well. Also, I would recommend adding in a real life example of a country experiencing a major form of net migration. Overall, you have a good start. Your addition has a encyclopedic tone and is grammatically correct.Nguyenandrew (talk) 23:55, 2 April 2018 (UTC)Nguyenandrew