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Jonathan Harnish's Peer Review of Naldy Solano's article

Hey Naldy! First thing I noticed was that you have no hyperlinks for some terms. I added a few to help you out! Your lead captures the important information that you have provided so far and goes in order along with your sections. Also, you have a lot of sources used (10). Do you think you can get more information out of them to expand on your article? I edited some of the wording and deleted the extra space before the section title "Samburu." Jlh428 (talk) 18:21, 2 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Anjali Patel's Peer Review of Naldy Solano's article

Hey! I believe that you can expand on alot of statements in your lead paragraph, such as the Cushitic language and what that has to do with your main topic. The introduction of the Cushitic language comes in a bit late, making your text sligtly confusing. Also you may want to double check your wording throughout your page because they're a few typos and grammar errors here and there. This will help your page flow a little better. I edited a few grammatical errors in your last paragraph.

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 I edited some of the wording and deleted the extra space before the section title "Samburu."
 [[User:Jlh428|Jlh428]] ([[User talk:Jlh428|talk]]) 18:21, 2 April 2018 (UTC)
+== Anjali Patel's Peer Review of Naldy Solano's article ==
+Hey!
+I believe that you can expand on alot of statements in your lead paragraph, such as the Cushitic language and what that has to do with your main topic. The introduction of the Cushitic language comes in a bit late, making your text sligtly confusing. Also you may want to double check your wording throughout your page because they're a few typos and grammar errors here and there. This will help your page flow a little better. I edited a few grammatical errors in your last paragraph.