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How do I talk to other people in either sandbox or eclass forum? <!-- Template:Unsigned --><small class="autosigned">— Preceding [[Wikipedia:Signatures|unsigned]] comment added by [[User:Breannapalmer|Breannapalmer]] ([[User talk:Breannapalmer#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/Breannapalmer|contribs]]) 18:24, 16 September 2019 (UTC)</small> <!--Autosigned by SineBot--> |
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== Testing New Sections on my own sandbox- peer review == |
== Testing New Sections on my own sandbox- peer review == |
Revision as of 22:03, 17 November 2019
Testing in Sandbox
talk talk talk talk Breannapalmer (talk) 23:26, 22 October 2019 (UTC) Wondering how sandbox works and how to choose an article and partner for assignments. Also using through devices and how/ where to access. Just test in the sandbox. Hi 👋 Breannapalmer (talk) 03:45, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Ok neat - is there an app for this? Breannapalmer (talk) 03:50, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Ok neat - is there an app for this? Breannapalmer (talk) 03:52, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- code test —— Breannapalmer (talk) 16:56, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- code test —— Breannapalmer (talk) 16:56, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- how do I sign with ———— Breannapalmer (talk) 16:56, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- how do I sign with ———— Breannapalmer (talk) 16:56, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
- I was working with all of this on my iphone device, now switching to computer, it seems that there are many ways to edit and connect. ––––
[PEER REVIEW] Hi Breanna, this is Talia! I am peer-reviewing your article, but I am not sure how this space will allow us to chat so if you have any questions about my feedback please ask me in class! First of all, I liked where you are going with your bullet points and what you are planning to write, I know a lot of it is bullet points (which is challenging for peer editing) but I think that it was some good brainstorming. Personally, I think that a lot has been written about Nellie McClung because of how famous she is, but I think it would be really really interesting to write about how she affected feminist thought her actions that had a negative impact (such as eugenics) and are anti-feminist, and how that has impacted feminist thought. For example, I think it would be interesting to learn about how she has lead to feminists being able to think about feminist and recognize the good they did, while also understanding the negative impacts that they had and how we can be critical of these actions. I think it would also be interesting to learn more about the conversations that feminists have had about whether or not she should even be considered feminist, as I think this is something I have heard lots about but not read a lot about and Wikipedia might be the first people learn about her and about this debate. Finally, I think it's important to make sure that you are not just repeating information, but are adding something new and interesting! I hope this all made sense! — Preceding unsigned comment added by TaliaMary (talk • contribs) 02:54, 8 November 2019 (UTC)
Article ideas : to do list
Who is missing and why: To add a link and article Peer reviews Lab day - advance Breannapalmer (talk) 03:53, 11 September 2019 (UTC) I believe I chose an article on Nellie McClung- — Preceding unsigned comment added by Breannapalmer (talk • contribs) 05:04, 13 September 2019 (UTC)
Testing New Sections on my own sandbox- peer review
test test — Preceding unsigned comment added by Breannapalmer (talk • contribs) 18:40, 23 October 2019 (UTC)
Peer Review #2
Hi Breanna! I like how detailed and extensive your research has been for this article. I think that it would also be beneficial to examine how Nellie's feminism benefited certain women while negatively impacting others. Perhaps expand upon how her involvement with eugenics would have been received by Indigenous feminist scholars or other types of feminists today; maybe this info could go into the legacy section. How is maternal feminism used to uphold current white supremacist values/policies/structures? Additionally, how will you write your information into the article? How exactly do you plan to incorporate your sources when your gathered information is in prose? I know this seems like so many questions, but I am just eager for the final result because McClung's feminism is so exciting and polarizing. Keep up the good work! Leslyn S (talk) 02:02, 9 November 2019 (UTC)
Thanks for the Peer Review Feedback!
I have incorporated this into my sandbox to develop. Breannapalmer (talk) 22:39, 9 November 2019 (UTC)
Instructor Feedback. Note: This article has received four peer reviews.
I will be sending a general statement that applies to all or virtually all of the first drafts and peer reviews through email to every member of the class, along with the grades for the peer reviews. On these "talk" pages I will only be posting my own feedback on the first drafts.
The McClung article is shockingly short. For instance, there is also not a word in the current article about her anti-war activism, which was central to her public life. The centrality of religion to her feminism is also dramatically lacking at the moment. One excellent piece of scholarship to use for that would be Warne, R. R., and Canadian Corporation for Studies in Religion. 2006. Literature As Pulpit : The Christian Social Activism of Nellie L. McClung. Dissertations SR. [Waterloo, Ontario]: Wilfrid Laurier University Press. https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=e000xna&AN=1433259&site=eds-live&scope=site. Even though the article is short, already a large section of it features a discussion of the negative/harmful/eugenicist side of Mcclung. In fact, the article is already skewed quite negative, and the peer reviews encourage doubling down on the negative aspects, or (in the case of one really extensive peer review) always making sure to have both negative and positive aspects present for “balance.” I would say this: if we do not also clarify the ways in which McClung is a positive figure (according to contemporary judgments) then we will not do a thing towards complicating the feminist legacy. We will just increase the extent to which McClung and women like her are caricatures who are dismissed… Simply increasing the space devoted to eugenics or maternal feminism or white supremacy per se would not necessarily be that useful, but the more sophisticated point made by Dixon might well be worth pursuing, that is, including a section about how the (in our current view) reprehensible aspects of her thought have spurred debates among (historians of) feminism about the negative aspects of the movement as a whole and about whether or not McClung should be considered a feminist. That per se could be a terrific focal point for the addition to the legacy section; the question only is “on what scholarship can you rely?” Perhaps look at: Sarah Carter -- A legacy of ambivalence : responses to Nellie McClung in Perry, Adele, Veronica Jane Strong-Boag, and Mona Gleason. 2002. Rethinking Canada : The Promise of Women’s History. Oxford University Press. https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=cat03710a&AN=alb.2591365&site=eds-live&scope=site. Just FYI Sarah Carter is here at the U of A in History and Classics and she would be able to point you towards more recent work on the subject.FeliceLifshitz (talk) 20:28, 11 November 2019 (UTC)FeliceLifshitz
[PEER REVIEW] Hi Breanna, this is Talia!
[PEER REVIEW] Hi Breanna, this is Talia! I am peer-reviewing your article, but I am not sure how this space will allow us to chat so if you have any questions about my feedback please ask me in class! First of all, I liked where you are going with your bullet points and what you are planning to write, I know a lot of it is bullet points (which is challenging for peer editing) but I think that it was some good brainstorming. Personally, I think that a lot has been written about Nellie McClung because of how famous she is, but I think it would be really really interesting to write about how she affected feminist thought her actions that had a negative impact (such as eugenics) and are anti-feminist, and how that has impacted feminist thought. For example, I think it would be interesting to learn about how she has lead to feminists being able to think about feminist and recognize the good they did, while also understanding the negative impacts that they had and how we can be critical of these actions. I think it would also be interesting to learn more about the conversations that feminists have had about whether or not she should even be considered feminist, as I think this is something I have heard lots about but not read a lot about and Wikipedia might be the first people learn about her and about this debate. Finally, I think it's important to make sure that you are not just repeating information, but are adding something new and interesting! I hope this all made sense! — Preceding unsigned comment added by TaliaMary (talk • contribs) 02:54, 8 November 2019 (UTC)
Update
Also unsure how to assign myxelf as a peer reviewer but have marked my peer reviews on the talk page of user sandboxes. I also have included in draft 2 a link to the main https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/History_of_feminism History of Feminism Page and already incorporated the Peer Review feedback received from Peers and Instructor (Librarian Linda Quirk referred to Professor for further feedback). Consulted also with C4W and Librarians in Rutherford for Nellie McClung Section in Library for further research and in preparing writings. Breannapalmer (talk) 22:02, 17 November 2019 (UTC)