Talk:2023 World Rally Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 07:30, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this up and probably share the comments in parts. Good luck! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 07:30, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	As per Earwig, There is a 91.4% correlation with 1, but this seems to be a copy from the Wiki page (date indicated as 27-Dec-23, which was after the edits) and is not used as a source Otherwise ok
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	While I find that most sections are sufficiently covered, I am concerned about the Season report. The section seems to be a summary of the results written in prose and barely covers any details apart from few instances. This definitely needs a work upon to expand the section to cover in sufficient detail.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	I am keeping this on abeyance as of now. Will add more comments as I review the sections. But I would like to know the response of the nominator, if willing to make changes, as often you are better knowledgeable on the subject and even larger changes can be effected in a few days with sufficient effort.

Comments

Lead

" fifty-first season of the competition organised" : What competition?

Calendar

Image caption: Rally Mexico returned to the calendar after when; What is pictured? (Description of year/details)
The championship was expected to be expanded to fourteen rounds: Expected by who? If it was the plan of the FIA, should mention as such saying "FIA planned for so and so"
However, the number of the events was reduced to thirteen following a lengthy delay of the calendar: Better to simply specify the date on which the calendar was released as "lengthy delay" is subjective as reader does not know when the calendar is generally released.
The anticipated rally based in Jeddah in Saudi Arabia was absent from the calendar: Again, it needs to tie with the earlier sentence (who anticipated, FIA).
The organizers of the rally had previously held a national event in 2022 in the bid of a 2023 return: Bit confused here, the national event was held as a part of the bid to FIA (before the bid to host a WRC event was made?) or as a preparation to host the 2023 WRC event?
Rally Chile rejoined the calendar after the Chilean protests and COVID-19 pandemic respectively ruled out the event in 2020 and 2021: Suggestion that it can be rephrased for better understanding to "after having been ruled out in 2020 and 2021 due to so and so"
a tri-nation event running a day each: The rally schedule does not seem to be designed to run a day each as it crosses multiple countries on the same day. Can keep it simple, "a tri-nation event held across"
organizers were seeking : "sought a return"
Several rally organizers also expressed their interests to return to the championship, including Rally Argentina, Rally Australia, the German Rally, and an event in Northern Ireland. The Argentine and Northern Irish bids ultimately failed: Rally Australia was already mentioned above, need not repeat. As the German rally bid was also successful, it can also be omitted. It can be simply, "Argentina and NI expressed interest in hosting so and so but failed"
In addition to the candidate events, the WRC Promoter GmbH was also working on the calendar expansion to the Middle East and United States.: Expansion when? If it was 2023, it should be mentioned as WRC wanted to host so and so in 2023, but failed due to whatever reason. Middle east should tie with the Saudi Arabia point mentioned earlier if that was the reason.
The headquarters of the Rally Italia Sardegna : A clarification, Is headquarters and base of the rally same or different? If same, please use uniform terminology across.

Entrants

The following teams, drivers and co-drivers are under contracts to contest the championship under Rally1 regulations: "...contested", past tense
General comment: As sources 41 to 53 are used to note the entrants, can be combined under a single citation
M-Sport signed a full-year deal with Ott Tänak and Martin Järveoja, who terminated their multi-year contract with Hyundai: the first part says the manufacturer signed a contract and the second part says that the drivers terminated the contract. Should probably follow uniformity. "A and B terminated their ... and signed a full year deal for 2023 with M-Sport"
Pierre-Louis Loubet's programme with the team was expanded, with Loubet entered every round as a manufacturer-registered points scorer.: "the team" refers to M-Sport or Hyundai? "Pierre-Louis Loubet's programme with xxx was expanded, and Loubet entered every round as a manufacturer-registered points scorer."
However, their partnership was ended before the 2023 Central European Rally. Benjamin Veillas, the ex co-driver of Sébastien Ogier, is set to replace Gilsoul.:Tense mismatch. "Their partnership ended before xxx and abc replaced xyz."
Adrien Fourmaux was demoted to the team's: Who was Fourmax? Fourmax, who drove for xyz in 2022, was demoted...
though he would substitute Loubet at the season finale: past tense, "substituted for"
his top-tier debut..." better to mention what the top tier is though it has been mentioned in the lead or simply keep it debut in the WRC
So was the Luxembourgian driver Grégoire Munster at the event: confusing, wasn't Munster at WRC2 as mentioned earlier? Better to remove the earlier reference to Munster and introduce him here directly. "abc and xyz made their debuts for the team at so and so as private/non point scoring."
Gus Greensmith left the team after eight years. He drove for Toksport in the WRC2 championship. : Combine the sentences
They were joined by Esapekka Lappi and Janne Ferm as the team's full-time crews: If they replaced Oliver Solberg and Elliott Edmondson, which is my understanding, those should be combined as the dropping comes in the last part.
Teemu Suninen was announced to succeed his position with co-driver Mikko Markkula: past tense, "succeeded"

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