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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 20:35, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 10:35, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
Will review @Epicgenius:. Always nice to review these. 750h+ 10:35, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
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building at 730 Fifth Avenue, on the southwest corner with 57th Street
probably should change "with" to "of"while the upper levels were converted to the luxury Aman
i'd recommend changing to "while the upper levels became the luxury Aman"The structure is a New York City designated landmark since 2024.
==> "The structure has been a New York City-designated landmark since 2024."The building's stepped, setback design was
remove the commaand four-story octagonal pyramidal roof
==> "and a four-story octagonal pyramidal roof"- Link facade
in 1964 and sold yet again
remove "yet"- Link OKO Group
site
townhouses at 10 and 12 West 56th Street are on the block to the south
remove "to the"Prior to the Crown Building's
Replace "Prior to" with "Before"
architecture
The Crown Building was designed by Charles D. Wetmore of Warren and Wetmore and was completed in 1921
i'd remove the second "was"By 2021, the annex on 56th Street had been replaced with a glass structure.
==> "In 2021, the annex on 56th Street was replaced with a glass structure."- Link first instance of facade
At ground level, the northern facade along 57th Street measures 162 feet (49 m) across and is divided vertically into 18 bays, while the eastern facade on Fifth Avenue is 100 feet (30 m) across and is divided into 11 bays.
I'd split this into two sentencesexcept on the 21st story and on its western portion.
remove the second "on"The gilded spandrel panels above the 22nd story are similar to the spandrel panels used
==> "The gilded spandrel panels above the 22nd story resemble those used"story rises a octagonal
==> "story rises an octagonal"had bluestone floors, carved-limestone walls
remove the hyphenOther amenity spaces in the hotel include a sky lobby, wine library, and piano bar.[41][72] In addition, the hotel includes a private club called Aman Club.[75][74]
I'd recommend changing one of the "include"(s) to "feature"(s)