Talk:Dongba symbols
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The paragraphs you added provide good information, but it might help to edit a little since there are various typing mistakes. It might also help to attempt to integrate your paragraphs with the rest since there seems to be a few repetition of information and awkward starts. Jcc349 (talk) 19:39, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
Nice work, Luna! You really filled out the article well. Your list of references at the end is good, but I think it might be a good idea to cite in-text as well, showing which information you got from which source. A few minor typos:
- There is an extra line between the second and third paragraph of the "origin and development" section.
- In the first paragraph of "origin and dev.", second sentence, you wrote "...the Dongba script was created the founder..." I think you meant to say "by the founder".
- In the "Usage" section, the first sentence of the first paragraph should be split into two sentences.
- In "Structure and Form", second paragraph, second sentence, last word "meanningful" is spelled wrong.
- Here and there a period at the end of a sentence doesn't have a space after it.
Overall, it looks great! --zcat13 (talk) 21:54, 19 November 2008 (UTC)