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The article is about the Observatory situated within the Gingin shire and is connected with the Zadko Telescope, AIGO, Gravity Discovery Centre. It educates the general public about the universe and research attached to the Zadko Telescope, SKA and Astronomy within Australia.
- Good article, references in place. I think you should go over it objectively once pretending you are a reader instead of the author. Think of what you would expect to read in an encyclopedia. Specifically, "These three unique centres combine to make "one" educational centre, just one hour north of Western Australia's capital city" sounds a bit promotional to me because it reflects opinion rather than fact. Why are the centres unique? Unique acording to whom? See what I mean? So, I would glean the article and make sure it's written from a neutral point of view. :) Nice work, though. :) Pianotech (talk) 11:23, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
This short article is about FutureSkills private high school. It offers credit courses for secondary students who are working to complete their OSSD (Ontario Secondary School Diploma). Its educational and informative website is updated regularly. ~~MH (talk) 04:46, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Please review this article and an immediet reply is needed. Thank You and hopefully this article is considered good for Wikipedia.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chellrey/Kirstie_Joan_Babor
Hello! This article is to update the information regarding the new title holder for Miss Philippines Water 2009. I hope this is ready enough to be moved and to go live on Wikipedia. Thank you so much. Good day. :)
- Nice - good job with the references although an infobox would be a good thing to think about including. See Template:Infobox person or Template:Infobox model or something like that. Chevymontecarlo - alt 11:36, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Hi, This is the first article I'm creating from scratch in Wikipedia. Please let me know if there are any mistakes in structure or in any other aspects of this page.
Thanks a lot!
- Hello there! In reading your article and checking your references, I feel the references are a little weak. The Microsoft link is just the company's press release, so that will not hold. The Belarus Technoligies Park link only provides a listing for the company. While this shows that the company exists, it doesn't discuss the company or what it does. Unless you add outside, independent, verifiable references, your article does not provide anything that would show why the company is notable and should appear in an encyclopedia. My recommendation is that you find such references and add them. Hope this helps. :) Take care, Pianotech (talk) 11:12, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Can you please help me to get this information on the site. I still can't add pictures or publish it.
- Hello! Right now, the only reference you have for the article is from the university itself. You need more to satisfy Wikipedia's notability and referencing requirements. I would find at least two independent sources you can reference before you publish. Hope this helps. :) Pianotech (talk) 11:03, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
Can you please help me to get this information on the site. I still want to add more info pictures but am not able to at the moment. Thank you ;)
My article about C. Bradford Welles is about his distinguished academic career at Yale University as an Ancient Historian and Papyrologist and his role in WWII, working in Counter Intelligence in Cairo for OSS from from 1944-46, for which he received an OBE.
My principal source is the New York Times Obituary of October 9, 1969- I cite it as a reference. But you have to have access to New York Times Select to retrieve it.
I also have copies (now declassified) of his OSS command in Cairo. And I have a copy of the OBE he received from King George VI. But the latter documents have no external links.
My other sources are links to books he has written.
This article provides a brief snapshot of public listed IT companies in India. I have taken the information from respective company wiki and clubbed in one page to access the company info at a glance.
My article about C. Bradford Welles is about his distinguished academic career at Yale University as an Ancient Historian and Papyrologist and his role in WWII, working in Counter Intelligence in Cairo for OSS from from 1944-46, for which he received an OBE.
My principal source is the New York Times Obituary of October 9, 1969- I cite it as a reference. But you have to have access to New York Times Select to retrieve it.
I also have copies (now declassified) of his OSS command in Cairo. And I have a copy of the OBE he received from King George VI. But the latter documents have no external links.
My other sources are links to books he has written.