User talk:Klmeyer13

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PEER REVIEW

User:Mfontaine Your topic Haus of Gaga provides some additional information on this internationally known popstar. You keep your entry neutral and provide some comprehensive details about the subject. It might be helpful to provide links to Andy Warhol and Lady Gaga for those readers not familiar with these artists. If you check www.answers.com., you will find some additional information such as, whether it is Gaga or GaGa. MTV.com may be another additional source for you. When adding your photos, I suggest you credit the source to avoid copyright problems. You have clear headings and and listing and numbering the creative team members seems like an appropriate format.: You may want to look over the writing and develop some consistency in your descriptions and check for punctuation.: So far, the information you have provided is interesting, comprehensive, and unbiased. I look forward to the finished product. Mfontaine (talk) 21:51, 20 March 2011 (UTC)

Peer Review by mmbero122

Looks pretty good, just a few things to think about.

Writing: In a the Inspiration (Andy Warhol) and Creation and Collections sections, I see a need for more prose. The quotes are appropriate, but without original writing to explain the quotes it was a bit confusing to read. Another minor correction can be made to the numbering of the members of the Haus of Gaga. Member 5 and 6 are merged with member 4. The writing of the members list could improve greatly with a touch more of professional writing. I understand that it is a list, but complete sentences would sound and flow better in my opinion.

Comprehensiveness: Good. Everything looks to be included.

Research: Sources are provided, but not in the normal Wiki format. Citing is done at the bottom of the page in bibliographic form.

Neutrality: Good

Format: Sectioning is good, with the pictures it will be a good page.

Mmbero122 (talk) 16:26, 20 March 2011 (UTC)

Peer Review by Chaniel Nelson

Let me say first and foremost that I love Lady Gaga. She is one of the few that dares to be different and learning more about here is always exciting to me, so I may be a little bias about how amazing this page is, since I am such a huge fan! I think this page is going to turn out very nicely, it gives more information about the Gaga Empire. Some strengths are that there is background information about the Hous of Gaga and what it is. All the way down to the members and their jobs credentials. I also like how you give examples of Gaga’s unique style with visuals (that I know are not yet posted) and a description of the visual underneath. Another thing that I like is that the page has what Hous of Gaga is doing and its future endeavors. Some weaknesses are that there might not be enough information about the people associated with Hous of Gaga. When I read through the page I was hoping to know the title of the members and a little more information about them, i.e. where are they from, who else have they worked with, how did they become a part of this empire. Also I believe it would be nice to see more information about how Lady Gaga started out, just a little, so there is some more background information. I know that Lady Gaga’s real name is Stefani Germanotta, what made her change it and want to start the Lady Gaga Empire. http://www.himho.com/stefani-germanotta-bio-27704/ I know a majority of your information is straight from the Hous of Gaga website which is perfect and has no bias opinion at all, just facts and information. So things that can be added or changed is the background information that you have, not just on Hous of Gaga but Lady Gaga herself. She was not always the powerhouse that she is today so expand on that. Why did the Hous of Gaga Empire even start? Does Gaga have plans of making the items in this collection available to the public? Who inspires Gaga’s fashion style? Things like this I am really interested in knowing and finding out about. I hope that this helps! Chaniel Nelson (talk) 00:22, 21 March 2011 (UTC)

It looks like your off to a really good start! I like the fact your talking about Lady Gaga's fashion, maybe it will help understand her strange personality. I can't wait to read more. A few suggestions I have are: 1. Maybe not give the personal information about the people that work in the Haus of Gaga just there job description maybe? I didn't see the point in it but I liked how you put the people that work for the company in here. 2. What got Lady Gaga started? What was her inspiration for these crazy creations? 3. Why was the comment about Andy Warhol in there? I didn't understand how that connected into your page. But as I read further down you say something about him having influences on The Haus of Gaga. Maybe you could have mentioned this before the quote by him? And give some more information on his influences on The Haus of Gaga. 4. Under the creations and collections section I thought you could make it clearer who said this? I wasn't sure who said it? 5. I liked how you put examples of her fashion. Maybe put links to some of it? But I think you said earlier you were going to put the pictures in a chart which I thought was a good idea. I also liked the music videos showing off the fashion I think it just shows how odd the clothing and accessories are different. 6. Is this a site where people can go and buy the clothing or is it just a site that you look at? 7. Is this even a real site because you mention that it isn't an official site? 8. Another thing I noticed was that it didn't seem like alot of information was given out recently about this site. Is it still up and working. Like what you said about the app that people could buy but you said because not a lot of activity had been posted on it and that it was deactivated. I hope I helped out! I enjoyed reading you page! Tisham (talk) 00:21, 21 March 2011 (UTC)tisham

Having read the page on Haus of Gaga, I believe your group is off to a good start! As it relates to background information, your group has a lot of informative material, but I would include a short summary of how the Haus of Gaga came to be; this is very important to have in one's "background" information. It also would help if you briefly discussed Lady Gaga and her incredible career, for while most have heard of the performer, this information would add to the page's comprehensiveness for those who are not quite familiar with the artist. I really liked how you discussed what the Haus of Gaga is and who its members are. This allows readers to understand what they are about to read as they proceed along the page. However, I would reconsider how you discuss the members. Wiki pages usually consist of textual paragraphs as opposed to lists, so the paragraph format may be more appropriate here. It is very helpful how the group included graphic images/ videos of Lady Gag's style-- Readers can then visualize/ understand what they are studying through this page! They are able to see the wonderful creations in which yall are discussing. Going down the page, I became confused with Andy Warhol's quote. Maybe if you add a comment before the quote, readers will have an easier time understanding what the purpose of the quote is and how it strengthens your group's page. The page is well-researched since a lot of the information comes from the Haus of Gaga website. Also, the page appears to have no bias and it is formatted correctly. I hope this input helps you as you all proceed to make progress in the future! You all are off to a great start, and I look forward to reading more on the topic soon!MichaelHornsby (talk) 03:08, 21 March 2011 (UTC)